User:Eatcookies

Bio

About me

My hobbies are baking, cooking, painting, watching Korean drama, and traveling. Traveling to different countries can be beneficial to your life by learning to form new techniques for everyday objects. Although, I am from the Pacific Northwest and the weather is usually gloomy, I love the sunny days here the most. I also love going to the beach and hanging out with my friends. My goal is to get my Associates degree in Science to become a Radiologic Technologist.

My Wikipedia interest

I can imagine using Wikipedia by gather information for future homework assignments, gain personal knowledge, and contribute my intelligence to the Wiki world. I would collect materials relating to subjects I am interested in such as Korean dramas. Recently, Korean culture has gain popularity and migrated over to the Western culture. As a volunteer, I would help create or add additional content of Korean culture from new actors in dramas to K-pop artist.

Article Evaluation

Recently, I finished a new documentary series that aired in January 2021 called “Surviving Death” on Netflix. It is about people who had near death experiences, mediums, and reincarnations. I do believe in spirits and I find mediums interesting that they have a gift to connect with the spirit world. First, I visited the Conduit (channeling) article on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: grammar error, irrelevant sentences, and no citations/references.  

Grammar Error:

Writing is very important especially in Wikipedia because of the communication they are giving to the readers. Since Wikipedia is a community of people around the globe, together they build factual information about a person, place, or thing. Reading the first paragraph on Conduit, I noticed that it has too many run-on sentences and commas. There are also many grammar errors in the second paragraph with punctuation, capitalization, and quotations. Having the proper writing skills will give readers a better understanding about the topic.

Irrelevant Sentences:

The beginning of the second paragraph, it mentions a Japanese shrine and religious spirit in Yoruba culture. In my opinion, I think it is irrelevant because it’s a general statement given. It does not further explain or provide more information about what a Conduit is or does. The sentences were not clear where it is heading towards. What I've noticed and learned in writing, you have to build up information that will lead up to the topic. For example, history, you would write about things leading up to the history topic.

No Citations and References:

Whether you are citing or referencing a news article or writing a history book, this is also another important feature to be doing especially in the twenty first century because there are lots of fake news on social media and random articles on the search engine. On Wikipedia, there are many citations, references, and Wiki-links to help the article become a reliable source. In the sentence, "In Yoruba culture, it is said that Elegba, the son of Osun, became the great conduit of ase (divine energy) in the Universe." I tried to search any information to see if this statement was true and as expected, no results were found. Also, this article is listed as a stub and last edited three months ago which is not currently updated.

Summary:

Because of the grammar errors, unrelated sentences, and its non-credible source, I would not recommend this Wikipedia article to anyone. This article still needs a foundation, editing, and more information about Conduit (Channeling).