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User:Chloeczhou/Halogenated ether/Nidhidanda28 Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Chloeczhou, Eeguale

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Chloeczhou/Halogenated ether
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

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General feedback

What the article does well:

  • the table of common halogenated ethers is clear
  • improvement in sentences (small details added such as 'a' and 'that' in uses in anesthesiology is impressive

What to add:

  • maybe explain each halogen in common halogenated ethers (maybe uses of each common halogenated ether just so we know why they're the common ones)
  • I think you should make one 'Uses' category and include each of the uses (uses in anesthesiology, uses in polymers, use as flame retardant) as subheadings (similar to how you did Toxicology of Halogenated Ethers).

Further detailed feedback

Lead: really good lead! I know what both an ether and a halogenated ether is from just the first paragraph. It is very clear and concise (I really like it!)

Structure: Good structure overall. I already mentioned this above, but maybe re-organize your 'uses' section to make it one big section with subsections of the 3 uses you mentioned. The rest of the structure is great!

Neutrality: overall, the writing is neutral (no biases).