User:Chaccocat/Periodic trends/Anonchemist Peer Review

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Chaccocat, Twllo

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User:Chaccocat/Periodic trends

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Periodic trends

Evaluate the drafted changes

(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

• The lead hasn't been officially been updated to wikipedia yet.
• Well-written introductory sentence that clearly introduces the topic of periodic trend
• The body part of the lead is overall well written however I would recommend also addressing that nucleophilicity + electrophilicity, nuclear charge is part of the article's major section as it looks like its going to be part of the body article. The sentence where it lists the major periodic trends (electronegativity, ionization energy) could be where you add this part, it looks like this sentence is where it lists the major sections of the periodic trend
• Yes, they are adding a new section of nucleophilicity + electrophilicity as part of the major periodic trends
• The lead is concise without being too overly detailed, I would suggest just changing the sentence that lists the major sections of this article

Content:

• Yes, it's relevant to the topic and up to date
• The lead part where it mentions organizing the elements by atomic number instead of atomic weight was a little bit confusing, as it looked like it would be elaborated more in the body paragraph. From the body paragraphs, I didn't see a section elaborating on the evidence organizing the elements based on atomic number groups elements with similar properties, is this part also part of the major section? I would suggest elaborating more on this point, potentially adding a sentence or two in the body paragraph to address the evidence organizing the elements based on atomic number has on grouping elements with similar properties
• Electronegativity increases as electronegativity decreases, therefore, electronegativity decreases left-to-right on the periodic table -> this sentence was also a bit confusing, as they have two words that contradict each other. does it mean electronegativity increases as nucleophilicity decreases?
• Topic isn't relevant to addressing underrepresented populations

Tone and Balance:

• The content is neutral, and doesn't side with one position

Sources + References:

• Yes, there was consistent citations throughout the article that links to either a wikipedia article already published or a secondary source
• Yes accurately reflects what the cited sources say
• The sources are thorough and current overall (all of the published articles are over 2000)
• Written by various authors (there was two citations that were written by the same author however that is fine as all of the other authors were different)
• The sources that were chosen were all good to use, as they are primary sources that have been peer-reviewed (not newspaper, or review articles)

Organization:

• Well-written overall, with no spelling or grammatical errors in the body paragraphs. I especially liked how the new articles written was broken down to subsections to reflect that

Images + Media:

• Has images included for electron affinity and atomic radius section. For the nucleophilicity and electrophilicity section the part where its describing the trend for nucleophilicity was a bit confusing if it was just read by text, I would recommend adding an image in that section potentially showing the the periodic table and the arrow for that trend
• The caption for the image in electron affinity was a little bit confusing... it explains the concept of the trend well however I would also recommend briefly describing what image represents before talking about the concept of electronegativity(ex. what do the dots between the Cl and Br represent?)
• Yes meets the copyright regulations
• If possible, the image can be made a bit bigger. im not sure what it looks like from your end but from mine, it looks very small and some of the text were hard to read from the image in the electron affinity section

New Article:

• Meets all notability requirements, supported by more than 3 secondary sources on the written subject.
• good detailed list of sources
• Some cited sources are yet to have links attached to them however the ones that had links worked and directed to the original source
• Follows the other patterns of articles well, by adding the nucleophilicity and electrophilicity they are adding to the list of possible periodic trends
• There were consistent citations to other wikipedia pages that already had the article

Overall Impressions:

• The new article for the nucleophilicity and electrophilicity was overall very well written. I liked how it briefly described the definition of both of the terms before it described the trend, there was also consistent citations through the article linking back to original wikipedia articles and primary sources. An improvement could be to add an image describing the trend of the electronegativity (potentially a periodic table that has an arrow showing the least electronegative element progressing to the most electronegative, then connect back to the original text describing the trend) as it could be a little bit confusing to picture it from the text by itself. I would also recommend fixing the sentence Electronegativity increases as electronegativity decreases, therefore, electronegativity decreases left-to-right on the periodic table (see content section for more feedback)