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Article Evaluations
[edit]- Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? I think everything that is in the article goes with the topic in some way.
- Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? I do not believe there are biased areas in this article.
- Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? The hairstyles in other places category is underrepresented.
- Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? The links in the article work.
- Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? Yes but i believe some need work.
- Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? I think some up to date things can be added.
- Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? yes.
- How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? This is a C class article.
- Does the Wikipedia article achieve its rhetorical objective - to inform and educate audiences about a particular topic? Yes. But i think more can be added.
Article Proposal & Bibliography
[edit]The C-class article that I choose to work on is “Discrimination based on hair texture." The article has a few things to add here and there as I previously stated in my article evaluations. Once again, I believe that more information can be added to the section about “Hair in other places” because it seems a little empty and there has to be more information out there. Also, another thing is I want to add updated information about discrimination on hair in school and in the workplace because it still exists, and people need to know about it. I think it may be a little difficult to find sources to use for this article, but I think I can make it better than what it is.
1. Howell, M., Robinson-Kurpius, Sharon, Homer, Judith, & Randall, Ashley. (2015). Intraracial Discrimination: Do Hair Texture and Skin Tone Really Matter?, ProQuest Dissertations and Theses.
2. Simmons, R., Mense, Evan G., Campbell, Kathleen, Crain-Dorough, Mindy, & Samsonov, Pavel. (2017). The Perceptions and Experiences of African American Female Educators Regarding How Skin Tone, Hair Texture, and Other Physical Characteristics Relate to Career Advancement in Educational Leadership, ProQuest Dissertations and Theses.
3. Greene, D. Wendy. "Title VII: What's Hair (and Other Race-Based Characteristics) Got to do with It," University of Colorado Law Review vol. 79, no. 4 (2008): p. 1355-1394.
Vetter's Feedback on proposal
[edit]Hi Arielle. I really like this article choice and I think you're going to be able to make some good development here. In addition to the additions you've listed in your proposal, I think you could also try to improve the article in terms of the two issues identified in the banner at the top of the article: it might contain original research, and it doesn't always cite sources. These go hand in hand sometimes, and you could improve existing content by making sure there's a source to back it up and that source is cited in an in-text citation. We can count this toward your ultimate article length as well. Your sources all seem to be really academic - it looks like you have two dissertations or theses and an academic (law) article. These are good and will probably be useful, but I think we need to find you some more popular and accessible sources as well (I'm thinking books, popular magazines, or other periodicals) that won't be too difficult to read or use too much jargon. Did you look for sources on the 'natural hair movement'? This is a related topic and might help. I'm also going to put in a question with the librarians. I'll put in your email so maybe they'll get back to you before we meet. Great start on this proposal, and we'll talk more tomorrow. -Dr. Vetter
Article Draft
[edit]Natural Hair in School
[edit]Discrimination based on hair texture is common in the United States. Butler High School in Louisiana dress code says that natural hair is “Extreme and Distracting” and are not permitted. Therefore students with natural hair are limited to hairstyles because this ban includes dreadlocks, twists, Mohawks and cornrows. The outrage of classmates and parents displayed on social media got a temporary suspension placed on the policy. [1] On February 2018, a 14 year old boy was placed in a room isolated from his other classmates because his haircut broke the dress code and was distracting.[2] His mother was told by the school that it would remain this way until his hair got cut or until his hair grew back. After a lot of going back and forth the district agreed to change how it enforces the hair policy. The mother of the boy was refunded for the second haircut and the school removed the suspension from the 14 year old boy record.[3]
Natural Hair in other places
[edit]In the Costa Rican society, African people are frowned upon for who they are. But that alone is not enough they also think bad about their hair. Children are molded at a young age to dislike their hair or to hide it. They spend a lot of money for synthetic hair, scalp ill-treatments and other ethnic groups hair to cover up their kinks.[4]
Natural Hair Community
[edit]The Natural hair trend is currently at a all time high. Therefore more groups, organizations and events have been developed for curly, kinky, coily get ladies the celebrate, embrace and boldly rock their natural hair, whether it be in the workplace or in general. The Curly Girl Collective is a online group that discusses ways to highlight natural hair. They have any annual “Curlfest” which is now on its fourth year, to bring the online community together in one place.[5]
Natural Hair in Media
[edit]Approximately 50 million dollars a years is spent by Black women to chemical straighteners.[6]It is to be believed that keeping professional images, avoiding negative career consequences and fitting in with their colleagues will help black individuals stay preserved by conforming to these standards. People on television including talk show host Oprah Winfrey used to keep her hair in a straight style to maintain her professionalism.
The Black Panther was released February 16, 2018. In this new superhero movie whole cast showcased natural hair. It was decided to not use any hair chemicals or hair irons on the hair. People questioned them on this decision but the insisted on showing the beauty and versatility of black hair.[7]
- The less serious nature roles included “broke” , “ghetto” or “Less fortunate.” The actor/actress hair is usually hidden under straight hair wigs or their hair is chemically processed.[6] When actress have these hair styles they play roles like the boss, living a lavish lifestyle, have the better job or making more money.[8]
Natural Hair in the Workplace
[edit]Discrimination based on hair texture is common in the workplace. Recently there was a case that involved Shirley Bryant and her workplace. Shirley Bryant worked as an Orientation and Assessment Facilitator for a work study program. She worked under two Black women. Shirley was a lighter skinned toned curly haired black girl. She says she over herd one of her supervisors talking about how she was damaging her hair with the chemicals she used to dye her hair blonde. The supervisor implied that she "wannabe" white girl.[8] Shirley felt she was terminated by her supervisor because she did not conform to her ideals of a blackness which she believes is wearing African hair wraps and having pure virgin natural hair. This case was able to be pursued and won by Shirley Bryant because she was the only person in the company that these specific dress and grooming standards applied to.
References
[edit]Possibly add to a section.
It’s a strategy that has pushed the beauty industry forward for years, and some natural hair brands are cashing in on it by promoting curlism. [9]
- ^ "Natural Hair is "Extreme, Distracting" According to a Louisiana High School's Dress Code".
- ^ "A Black Student Was Suspended Because of Shaved Head".
- ^ "A Fresno honor student got popular haircut, but school officials didn't like it".
- ^ Miller, Carmen. "Uncovering the Kink Celebrating my Black Identity: Perceptions on Afro-Costa Ricans Natural Hair".
- ^ "At Curlfest, a Celebration of Natural Hair and Black Beauty". The New York Times.
- ^ a b "The Hair Dilemma: Conform to Mainstream Expectations or Emphasize Racial Identity".
- ^ "Black Panther Is a Beautiful Showcase for Natural Hair".
- ^ a b "Black women can't have blonde hair ... in the workplace".
- ^ "Do Natural Hair Brands Profit Off of the Obsession with Looser Curl Patterns?".