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User:Avrillarios/Healthcare in Nicaragua/AB.cal Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Avrillarios

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Avrillarios/Healthcare in Nicaragua
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Healthcare in Nicaragua

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Overall the additions are informative and seem to update the article with more marginalized viewpoints and recent developments! I would suggest keeping the tone neutral by eliminating diction such as "extremely" and "suffering". The final added sentence doesn't have a source and seems to be making a claim based on the information presented; since this is Wikipedia, I would suggest either removing the sentence or changing it to be a summary of a cited source. I would further suggest expanding on what the impact of these NGOs have been, both good and bad.