User:Ands1234
- Right off the bat, the opening sentence of the article mentions a "long history" in reference to the popular phrase, but this history is nowhere to be found in the article's contents.
- The article should include reliable sources that detail the phrase's origin (if this can be found) in a history section, not only opinions on whether or not there are stupid questions.
- The lead description that explains the phrase is wordy and written in an informal manner.
- The opening paragraph contains grammatical mistakes; for example, the last sentence is missing a comma after "In many cases."
- The article might benefit from a section that outlines a few major references to the phrase in popular culture or literature so that readers could have an understanding of what context it is used in.
- The second example in the "there are no stupid questions" opinions section is too vague.
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- Wikipedia has already caught that the article does not distinguish between types of degradable plastic, which can lead to confusion.
- Additionally, the article uses complex language to describe concepts that are already extremely technical. Using simpler language would help make it more accessible to the everyday reader.
- Possibly change "examples" section to "types of biodegradable plastic" to be more clear.
- Why is there both an "environmental benefits" section and another "environmental concerns and benefits" section? I think it would make more sense to completely separate environmental benefits and concerns into two distinct sections and avoid combining the two.
- Citations are needed in the "environmental concerns and benefits" section.
- The "energy costs for production" section could be renamed to simply "production" and expand to include how biodegradable plastic is made and its energy cost.
- If there are regulations for biodegradable plastic in countries other than the U.S., these should be included in the "regulations" section.
- The article may also benefit from a "history" section that details the development and invention of biodegradable plastic.
Articles for Improvement
[edit]Havanese dog The audience for this article is comprised of current owners of a Havanese, anyone interested in potentially owning one, or someone that wants to explore the advantages and disadvantages of certain dog breeds. The purpose of the article is to give a general explanation of the breed, including its temperament, health, appearance, care, and history. The article succeeds in providing an abundance of information about the Havanese breed, but could use some improvements. It is not the information in the article that is lacking, but rather the way in which it is presented. First, the lead is lengthy and redundant, as it gives many details that can be found in the appropriate sections later in the article. Additionally, the article requires additional citations in the "Temperament" section. I also believe the "At work" section could use some improvements. Possibly changing the title to "Duties" would be more relevant to its content. Finally, the article needs to be written in a style that reflects the encyclopedic tone.
Tattoo artist This article is geared towards those interested in a profession as a tattoo artist or those beginning to get tattooed, and want to learn more about the role of a tattoo artist. However, this article is written as a personal essay and requires citations. It needs to be rewritten from a neutral point of view with an encyclopedic tone. I believe the article may benefit from a "Tattoo styles" section, as this reflects upon the artist themselves. This could replace the current "Artwork" section, which only has a couple sentences which do not provide sufficient information. As well, a "Famous tattoo artist" section could give readers some reference to examples of popular artists. In the talk page, someone pointed out that some of the terms in the "Tools" section are technical and may be inaccessible to the average reader, so this section should be revised using simpler language.
Gender in horror films This article is an essay posted to Wikipedia, so it needs many changes. Its audience consists of those interested in the horror genre as well as those interested in how gender is portrayed in a variety of media, including film. Because this is an essay, it has a personal tone which needs to be revised as an encyclopedic style with a neutral perspective. I was a bit confused by what the "Women vs men" section would be about, as the title is vague. I think revising it as "Portrayal of women vs men" would be more clear. This section also presents opinions without a factual basis or citations.