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Article Evaluation (wk 2) - Spastic Cerebral Palsy

This article is not well written. Within the first few paragraphs, there are a lot of grammatical errors and a few sentences that don't make sense. One of the sentences looks as though it should be 2 sentences (within the first paragraph). It's easy to understand, but the text does not appear to be proofread. In the introduction, a few percentages are used without a proper citation (wikipedia wrote medical citation needed at the end of the paragraph). Overall, I do not believe that this is well written and could use an overhaul in terms of making the language sound more professional.

Citation #4 in the article is used in the scientific classifications section. There is a part of this cited article that is almost verbatim towards the end of this section. It discusses the prescription of ankle-foot orthoses for this diagnosis of cerebral palsy. This chunk of the article should be re-written to eliminate paraphrasing. As written, I'm not sure that it needs wikipedia guidelines for using information from an article without violating the plagiarism rule. Citation #5 in the article is also used in the same section as citation #4 above. It discusses almost word-for-word what the introductory paragraphs to the cited article has written. This, too, appears to be paraphrased minimally, which would violate Wikipedia's guidelines. It does not appear that the author(s) of this article took a lot of time to rewrite academic information in their own words.

According to the talk page, this article was written as part of an undergraduate neurobiology course assignment in 2013. It was last edited at the beginning of 2017. It has also been rated as "low importance" on WikiProject Medicine and Neuroscience. Nothing written in this Wikipedia article appears to contain any bias or opinions and appears to have a fair amount of information on the topic.

There is no text in the "Diagnosis" section that needs to be completed (my assumption is diagnostic criteria from a physician). Other than this, it is a fairly complete article.

Week 4: Contributions to the article Rhizotomy

I'd like to make several different edits to this page including grammar, addition of reliable sources, expansion of certain sections (including complications, intro, and background), and adding in some pictures to make the page more appealing to the eye. I would also like to look into more functional outcomes and perhaps clinical presentations of patients with spasticity prior to the selective dorsal Rhizotomy surgery. I have listed a few different sources that I think will help- I will continue to add to the repertoire of sources as time goes on.

Farmer, J., & Sabbagh, A. J. (2007). Selective dorsal rhizotomies in the treatment of spasticity related to cerebral palsy. Child's Nervous System, 23(9), 991-1002. doi:10.1007/s00381-007-0398-2

Golan, Jeff & Hall, Jeffery & O'Gorman, Gus & Poulin, Chantal & Ezer Benaroch, Thierry & Cantin, Marie-Andree & Farmer, Jean-Pierre. (2007). Spinal deformities following selective dorsal rhizotomy. Journal of neurosurgery. 106. 441-9. 10.3171/ped.2007.106.6.441.

Cahill-Rowley, K., & Rose, J. (2014). Etiology of impaired selective motor control: emerging evidence and its implications for research and treatment in cerebral palsy. Developmental Medicine & Child Neurology, 56(6), 522-528. doi:10.1111/dmcn.12355

Bolster, E. A., Schie, P. E., Becher, J. G., Ouwerkerk, W. J., Strijers, R. L., & Vermeulen, R. J. (2013). Long-term effect of selective dorsal rhizotomy on gross motor function in ambulant children with spastic bilateral cerebral palsy, compared with reference centiles. Developmental Medicine & Child Neurology, 55(7), 610-616. doi:10.1111/dmcn.12148

Reworking the article: Rhizotomy

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