Template talk:Did you know nominations/Milly Clegg

Hook modifications

... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg appeared at three FIFA World Cups in under twelve months, something which led to her being called "an absolute unicorn"? [2023-07-30 at 21:46:23, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg's third FIFA World Cup appearance in under twelve months, led to her being called "an absolute unicorn"? [2023-07-30 at 21:47:17, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg's third FIFA World Cup appearance in under twelve months led to her being called "an absolute unicorn"? [2023-07-30 at 21:47:31, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 22:25, 30 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook phrasing

Since the modifications are now noted here, I'm note sure whether to have this discussion here or at DYK talk. Either way, @AirshipJungleman29: the modification(s) are both inaccurate and would make the hook substantially less interesting. A player makes a World Cup appearance every match they play; three World Cup matches in twelve months is just they showed up for the first round. And Clegg already made more than three appearances in the first of her three World Cups. Perhaps "...Clegg [making appearances/appearing] at three FIFA World Cups in under twelve months led to..." or something, since I'm guessing the longer second clause was the reason for change. Kingsif (talk) 00:35, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

An excellent point; my apologies Kingsif, I should've thought of that. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 08:25, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Haha, it's good, thanks for putting effort into this plan! Kingsif (talk) 10:30, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg's third FIFA World Cup appearance in under twelve months led to her being called "an absolute unicorn"? [2023-07-30 at 21:47:31, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg' was called "an absolute unicorn" after appearing at three FIFA World Cups in under twelve months? [2023-07-31 at 08:27:03, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 09:25, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg' was called "an absolute unicorn" after appearing at three FIFA World Cups in under twelve months? [2023-07-31 at 08:27:03, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that New Zealand footballer Milly Clegg was called "an absolute unicorn" after appearing at three FIFA World Cups in under twelve months? [2023-07-31 at 11:33:00, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 12:25, 31 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]