Template talk:Did you know nominations/Dolwyddelan Castle

CLOP

@Bruxton firstly thank you, I'm very glad you like the article.

On WP:CLOP I agree the sentence was a bit close, so I've done some digging and found a second source which has allowed me to re-write it in a way which doesn't closely paraphrase either source. It now reads "...an English garrison which was supplied with white material from Ireland and white stockings to use as winter camouflage." I'd suggest changing the end of the hook to "...were supplied with white material and stockings to use as winter camouflage", what do you think? A.D.Hope (talk) 01:36, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@A.D.Hope: I did not think it was serious enough to worry. I usually call out small things prior to promotion make the administrator who promotes to queue aware that I am checking thoroughly. If it is an issue they will call for changes with pings. I hope you continue to contribute great articles to DYK. I appreciate your work! Bruxton (talk) 01:44, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I reckon the sentence would have fallen under WP:LIMITED if I couldn't find a second source, but you encouraged me to look and it's improved the article! Thank you again, I appreciate your work on the admin side of things. A.D.Hope (talk) 01:47, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured from the Welsh on 18 January 1283, its new English garrison were equipped with winter camouflage of white tunics and stockings? [2023-08-04 at 23:23:35, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with white tunics and stockings as winter camouflage? [2023-08-04 at 23:40:21, by AirshipJungleman29]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 00:25, 5 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with white tunics and stockings as winter camouflage? [2023-08-04 at 23:40:21, by AirshipJungleman29]
... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with white tunics and stockings as winter camouflage? [2023-08-05 at 01:09:31, by BorgQueen]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 01:25, 5 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with white tunics and stockings as winter camouflage? [2023-08-05 at 01:10:15, by BorgQueen]
... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with winter camouflage of white material and stockings? [2023-08-05 at 09:40:29, by A.D.Hope]
... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison were equipped with winter camouflage of white material and stockings? [2023-08-05 at 09:41:56, by A.D.Hope]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 10:25, 5 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison were equipped with winter camouflage of white material and stockings? [2023-08-05 at 09:41:56, by A.D.Hope]
... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with white tunics and stockings as winter camouflage? [2023-08-05 at 11:23:50, by BorgQueen]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 11:25, 5 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hook modifications

... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison was equipped with white tunics and stockings as winter camouflage? [2023-08-05 at 12:55:55, by Ravenpuff]
... that after Dolwyddelan Castle (pictured) was captured in January 1283, its new garrison were equipped with winter camouflage of white material and stockings? [2023-08-05 at 14:53:37, by BorgQueen]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 15:25, 5 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]