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Shinde Chhatri

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The result was: rejected by Panyd^{The muffin is not subtle}

... that you cannot open your umbrella when inside Shinde Chhatri, a memorial to Mahadji Shinde, even when it is raining as it is considered disrespectful to the warrior?

Reviewed: Not a self nom --Srikeit 06:15, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Created by Tambeparag (talk). Nominated by Srikeit (talk) at 06:00, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Made during the Editing Sundays activity by the Campus Ambassadors in Pune --Srikeit 06:15, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The hook is good but reads a bit awkwardly to me. I'd suggest rewording to the following:
ALT1: that when at Shinde Chhatri, a memorial to the warrior Mahadji Shinde, visitors cannot open their umbrellas even in rain, as it is considered disrespectful? rʨanaɢ (talk) 10:12, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

ALT1 sounds much better. Thanks! :) --Srikeit 15:35, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Now that I think of it, it might be even better without "a memorial to the warrior Mahadji Shinde]]"... loses some context, but makes the hook shorter, punchier, and it might be more likely that people click it to find out more. rʨanaɢ (talk) 01:57, 28 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Like ALT2: ... that when at Shinde Chhatri visitors cannot open their umbrellas even in rain?

Good idea. Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:47, 7 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Article currently has an expansion tag and there are some unreferenced sentences. [1] Seems to be some close paraphrasing too. Otherwise, length and date check out. Hook fact is referenced. Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:14, 9 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Issues not addressed in one week. Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:45, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]