Template:Did you know nominations/William James Whipper
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: rejected by — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:06, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
Close paraphrasing
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William James Whipper
[edit]- ... that in 1868, African-American politician William James Whipper sought voting rights for "every citizen" in South Carolina, both women and men?
- ALT1:... that African-American lawyer William James Whipper helped rewrite the state constitution of South Carolina during Reconstruction?
- Comment: Article recently created.
Created by Cliotropic (talk). Self nominated at 15:10, 27 May 2014 (UTC).
This article does not currently qualify for DYK as it is too short, just 863B, and far short of the minimum 1500B. It is also plastered with "This section requires expansion" tags. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:29, 31 May 2014 (UTC)
No improvement after 2 weeks, suggest close. Article can likely be renominated as 5X expansion if improved. --ThaddeusB (talk) 01:13, 14 June 2014 (UTC)
- In a few hours I will make the article long enough to meet DYK inclusion criteria.--Skr15081997 (talk) 03:03, 15 June 2014 (UTC)
Article has been expanded to 1830 characters. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:21, 17 June 2014 (UTC)
New enough and long enough, though I'm surprised the article is still so bare-bones. There is a wealth of biographical information in footnote 1. This appears to be the nominator's first DYK, so no QPQ needed (if I'm wrong, please let me know). Neither hook is cited in the article. The paraphrasing is really close in several places:- Source: Whipper was born January 23, 1834 in Norristown, Pennsylvania and named for his uncle, William Whipper, the prominent abolitionist. (...) He moved to Ohio and became active in the abolition movement.
- Article: William James Whipper was born on January 23, 1834 in Norristown, Pennsylvania. He was named after his uncle William Whipper who was a noted abolitionist. He moved to Ohio where he became a member of the abolition movement.
- Source: In the army he had been court-martialed twice, once for gambling and again for insulting a white lieutenant.
- Article: During his service he was court-martialed twice, once for gambling and the other time for insulting a white lieutenant.
- Yoninah (talk) 17:39, 18 June 2014 (UTC)
- The edits on June 19 did not eliminate the basic close paraphrasing; it's still bad. The penultimate sentence of the "Early life and career" section is simply untrue: Thurgood Marshall was the first African-American justice on the U.S. Supreme Court. The final sentence there simply doesn't make sense as worded. This article needs a good copyedit; perhaps the Guild of Copy Editors would be willing? The nominator, Cliotropic, hasn't edited Wikipedia for four weeks. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:00, 24 June 2014 (UTC)