Template:Did you know nominations/University Club of Albany

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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 20:03, 30 December 2011 (UTC)

University Club of Albany

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... that the bowling alley in the basement of the University Club of Albany (pictured) is one of the oldest in the U.S. and may be the oldest private one in continuous use in New York?

Reviewed: Israel Friedman of Ruzhyn

Created/expanded by Daniel Case (talk). Self nom at 22:40, 22 December 2011 (UTC)

Age, length, referencing all in order. Nice article. However, the hook line in the article is a very close paraphrase from the source. Yoninah (talk) 23:21, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

This concern has come up before when I've done DYKs where the hook fact has to be very precisely worded to convey the intended information (I had it expressed with Gomez Mill House a long time back; that discussion might be of interest). If someone can find a better way to say it, I'm open to suggestion. Daniel Case (talk) 02:44, 30 December 2011 (UTC)

I tweaked the line; there's not much else to do about it. :) Hook ref verified. Good to go. Yoninah (talk) 12:20, 30 December 2011 (UTC)