Template:Did you know nominations/Tharanga Goonetilleke
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 03:56, 5 May 2014 (UTC)
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Tharanga Goonetilleke
[edit]... that Tharanga Goonetilleke is the first Sri Lankan woman to attend the Julliard School?
- Reviewed: House at 130 Mohegan Avenue
Created by I am One of Many (talk). Self nominated at 02:59, 4 May 2014 (UTC).
- Everything looks good. It's new enough. Long enough. Elaborately sourced. However, I'm not too fond of the hook. I think many readers don't know what the Julliard School is or what its significance is. Consequently, it might not be interesting or create the impact this article deserves. So I propose an alt hook:
- ALT1 ... that Tharanga Goonetilleke is the first Sri Lankan woman to attend the Julliard School, one of the world's leading music schools?
I think this alternative hook will attract more attention. Let me know what you think. Please ping me on my TP when ready. Étienne Dolet (talk) 03:37, 4 May 2014 (UTC)
- Your proposed alt works for me and I think you are correct about the need for clarification. I am One of Many (talk) 04:01, 4 May 2014 (UTC)
This article needed to be copyedited urgently. In the future, I suggest having another editor provide a peer-review for you before nominating articles to DYK or GA and FA for that matter. At any rate, I did the best I could. As for everything else, it is good to go. I support ALT1. Nice article. Étienne Dolet (talk) 04:32, 4 May 2014 (UTC)