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The result was: rejected by Yoninah (talk) 10:29, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
Unaddressed close paraphrasing
@Evrik: Thank you for beginning the review and sorry for replying late. If you could indicate some examples to help me understand what is to be done, it would be helpful. DishitaBhowmik 17:31, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
The tone sounds like a press release. Pleas make the article more neutral. --evrik(talk) 17:33, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
@Evrik: Text edited to sound more neutral. DishitaBhowmik 17:58, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
ALT2:... that Sikkim's last king founded tea farming in the region to provide employment to the large number of Tibetan refugees living in the state? --evrik(talk) 22:09, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
looks better. I am proposing a new hook. --evrik(talk) 22:09, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
I agree that alt hook 2 looks better and concise. DishitaBhowmik 16:41, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
for ALT2 hook. AGF on prior review for other aspects. SpinningSpark 13:01, 2 May 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I came by to promote this but the article has quite a bit of close paraphrasing, as does the hook:
Source: It all started with the virgin initiative for tea production by the last king of Sikkim in a bid to provide employment to a large number of Tibetan refugees living erstwhile in this region of India.
Article: It started with the establishment of the Temi garden by the last king of Sikkim, Palden Dhondup Namgyal, in an attempt to provide employment to a large number of Tibetan refugees living in the region.
Source: The first flush of Sikkim Tea, harvested during springtime, has a unique taste and aroma. The refined golden liquor has a light floral finish and a hint of sweet lingering taste.
Article: The first flush of Sikkim tea is harvested during springtime and has a unique taste and aroma. The tea is golden in color and has a light floral finish. It has a slightly sweet taste.
Source:The third flush or Monsoon Flush of Sikkim Tea creates a full bodied cup with mellow taste. The final flush or Autumn Flush of Sikkim Tea has a well-rounded taste and the light hint of warm spices.
Article: The third flush (also called Monsoon Flush) is full-bodied and has a mellow taste. The final flush (or Autumn Flush) of the Sikkim tea has a well-rounded taste and the slight hint of warm spices.
Source: Sikkim also produces the delicate white tea, which is manufactured from the buds and unfurled new leaves
Article: a delicate white tea, which is manufactured from the buds and unfurled new leaves
Source: It is one of the youngest gardens in tea history and is completely organic.
Article: It is one of the youngest gardens in tea history and is completely organic.
Source: Most of the garden is planted with Chinary bushes with patches of TV1 and TV2 clonal bushes. ... The estate produces around 1200 kg of tea in a year.
Article: Most of the garden is planted with Chinary bushes with patches of TV1 and TV2 clonal bushes. The estate produces around 1200 kgs of tea in a year.
Source: Glenburn is a heavenly little plantation retreat that lies on a hillock above the banks of the River Rungeet
Article: Glenburn is a plantation retreat that lies on a hillock above the banks of the River Rungeet.
Source: Started by a Scottish tea company in 1859, Glenburn then passed into the hands of one of India’s pioneering tea planting families – The Prakashes, One of India's pioneering tea-planting families
Article:It was started by a Scottish tea company in 1859 and then passed into the hands of a tea planting family, the Prakashes (also known as the “Chaiwala family“ - which literally means “tea planters“).
Source: The “tea estate” experience was inspired by the vineyards of Europe and other parts of the world, where visitors observe the wine-making process, taste the wine and shop for wine, local crafts and produce.
Article: inspired by the vineyards of Europe and other parts of the world, where visitors could observe the wine-making process, taste the wine and shop for wine, local crafts and produce.
Source: The extract showed significant inhibitory activity against carrageenin, histamine, serotonin and prostaglandin-induced pedal inflammation. The extract inhibited exudative inflammation. The tea extract also inhibited cotton pellet-induced granuloma formation and adjuvant-induced polyarthritis. Black tea extract showed significant inhibition against glucose oxidase-mediated inflammation. The present observations establish the efficacy of this particular variety of black tea, both in the exudative and proliferative forms and as well in the chronic phase of inflammation.
Article: Significant inhibitory activity, caused by hot water extract of black tea of Sikkim variety, has been observed against carrageenin, histamine, serotonin, and prostaglandin-induced pedal inflammation. The extract also inhibited exudative inflammation, cotton pellet-induced granuloma formation and adjuvant-induced polyarthritis. The extract has also shown significant inhibition against glucose oxidase-mediated inflammation. The observations have established the efficacy of this particular variety of black tea in the chronic phase of inflammation.
I suggest you eliminate the overly promotional description of the product and also don't copy the scientific language. Flowery descriptions of the tea should be put in quotes. Yoninah (talk) 19:35, 2 May 2020 (UTC)
I had noted the flowery language before, but when I ran earwig, I didn’t catch the close paraphrasing. I agree with what was said above. --evrik(talk) 02:38, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
Although Dishita Bhowmik was pinged on their talk page on May 2, they haven't responded, perhaps because their most recent edits are April 17 and April 30. However, it has been ten days, and the close paraphrasing is quite serious. Marking this for closure; if the nominator returns before this is closed and is prepared to address the issues in a timely manner, the nomination can remain open. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:42, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
--evrik (talk) 18:15, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
looks better. I am proposing a new hook. --evrik (talk) 22:09, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I came by to promote this but the article has quite a bit of close paraphrasing, as does the hook:
Although Dishita Bhowmik was pinged on their talk page on May 2, they haven't responded, perhaps because their most recent edits are April 17 and April 30. However, it has been ten days, and the close paraphrasing is quite serious. Marking this for closure; if the nominator returns before this is closed and is prepared to address the issues in a timely manner, the nomination can remain open. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:42, 12 May 2020 (UTC)