Template:Did you know nominations/Shooting of Aderrien Murry

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The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet (talk) 17:17, 11 July 2023 (UTC)

Shooting of Aderrien Murry

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... that police in Indianola, Mississippi shot an unarmed 11-year-old African-American boy after responding to his 911 call for help at his home? Source: [1] [2] [3]
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Micronations: The Lonely Planet Guide to Home-Made Nations
- Please ping me if you review. starship .paint (exalt) 14:47, 4 June 2023 (UTC)

Created by Starship.paint (talk). Self-nominated at 14:56, 1 June 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Shooting of Aderrien Murry; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

I have done some changes to the page but still find my self eligible for doing the review. The page is long and new enough. QPQ is provided by the OP and no copyvios was observed. References are suitable and back the text. Though not an explicit DYK requirement, the page would better be sectioned so the readers can follow the incident in an organized manner. As for the hook, it's hooky enough, being fully supported by multiple reliable sources. Among others, this source fully support the hook wording. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mhhossein (talk • contribs) 07:44, 18 June 2023 (UTC)
- @Mhhossein: - thank you for review. is sectioning the only change required? starship .paint (exalt) 10:56, 18 June 2023 (UTC)
  - Starship.paint You're welcome. Yes, but it seems one of the titles is too long. Also, please rephrase the mother's account so that you don't use":". --Mhhossein ^talk 19:15, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
    - @Mhhossein: - I changed part of it, but I think the remaining parts are best represented with the direct quotes to show the alleged situation of the shooting. starship .paint (exalt) 03:00, 22 June 2023 (UTC)
      - Thanks for the change, but it's still not encyclopedic I think. Read my comment once again plz. --Mhhossein ^talk 06:56, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
        @Mhhossein: - I have further rephrased the mother's account. starship .paint (exalt) 15:25, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
        I made a small tweak. We can go ahead with the proposed hook. --Mhhossein ^talk 09:18, 25 June 2023 (UTC)