Template:Did you know nominations/Shine (Years & Years song)

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The result was: promoted by Victuallers (talk) 13:49, 5 August 2015 (UTC)

Shine (Years & Years song)

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... that it has been suggested that the similarity between "Shine" by Years & Years and "Call the Shots" by Girls Aloud would have "inspired eight bootlegs, two compilation albums and a club night by now" had it been released in 2012?

Comment: If you are looking for a review to accept quickly as part of a QPQ, do not review this. It was hastily cobbled together during a spare lunch break of 30 minutes three days ago, and this fact shows. I haven't checked the hook, either, but it may be longer than 200 characters.

5x expanded by Launchballer (talk). Self-nominated at 11:22, 25 June 2015 (UTC).

Hook is 230 characters, far over the maximum, and speaking of QPQs, this nomination still doesn't have one after four weeks. Furthermore, article had two huge blockquotes (now noted in article) that decrease its prose count from 1699 to under 1000 prose characters. I initially considered giving this a slash icon, but this nomination is so far from meeting DYK requirements and by an experienced nominator, Launchballer, who knew this was substandard to start with yet did nothing in four weeks to fix the known issues, that I'm marking it for closure. If Launchballer does the necessary improvements before the nomination is closed, then this can continue. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:42, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

I'm annoyed with myself because I thought I'd completely reviewed Template:Did you know nominations/Angelina Jolie filmography - no I hadn't. Try this. The article is now back up to 1,500 characters.

ALT1: ~~... that an interactive music video for Years & Years' Shine?~~--Laun chba ller 18:03, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

Launchballer, I'm afraid ALT1 doesn't parse. Possessive doesn't work in the hook as written, and even if it's removed, "an interactive" would demand "Shines" rather than "Shine". Please try something else. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:11, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

ALT2: ... that an interactive music video for Years & Years' "Shine" was released? was what I meant.--Laun chba ller 17:53, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

ALT2a: ... that Years & Years released an interactive music video for their song "Shine"? —BlueMoonset (talk) 02:27, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Full review needed now that article has been expanded and has a potential hook. I'm assuming that it's the interactive part that contributes to the interest of the hook (which would otherwise be quite boring and thus ineligible); I've rewritten ALT2 as ALT2a to make the wording smoother and a bit more interesting, so a new reviewer will be needed. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:27, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

@Launchballer: New at time of nom, long enough, neutral, verifiable, and no copyvios or close paraphrasing detected. Hook cited and short enough. I recommend proposing an ALT3 that includes slightly more detail to make this more interesting. If a reader glosses over interactive or misses the meaning, then this becomes the least interesting hook of all time. By providing slightly more detail and possibly incorporating the CYOA quote, you can definitely make this better. If you decide not to do that, ALT2a is good to go, as the "interactive" part is still interesting enough to meet criteria. I'm striking ALT2 because the passive is not desirable there, and 2a is identical in terms of content. If you propose an alt, ping me and I'll review it quickly. ~ Rob^Talk 04:19, 3 August 2015 (UTC)