Template:Did you know nominations/Sheree Fitch

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The result was: promoted by G S Palmer (talk • contribs) 19:45, 1 February 2015 (UTC)

Sheree Fitch

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... that Canadian children's author Sheree Fitch has often acted as poet laureate of a golf tournament?

ALT1:... that Canadian children's author Sheree Fitch has been the poet laureate of a golf tournament?
ALT2:... that Canadian children's author Sheree Fitch was the poet laureate of a golf tournament in the Arctic?
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2x expanded and sourced (BLP) by HazelAB (talk). Self nominated at 00:36, 3 January 2015 (UTC).

This article was actually expanded tenfold on December 31. Before that it was a BLP with 1 source, but that was a dead link. HazelAB (talk) 13:27, 23 January 2015 (UTC)

I'll do a review of this article and be back shortly with comments. Montanabw^(talk) 03:45, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

@HazelAB: here is the review:
qpq done. Hook short enough and sourced, article has more than 5x expansion within period nominated, well-sourced, neutral tone, no apparent copyvio, neutral, stable. HOWEVER,
There is virtually no wikilinking in the article, none in the body, and there are many places where that would be appropriate. I'd like to see that come up to speed before I give it the green light for the main page.

@Montanabw: Sorry, but I don't understand. It seems to me that pretty much everything that could be wikilinked has been. For example, there are 3 wikilinks in the first sentence of the lede, 10 in the first paragraph of the Biography section.... HazelAB (talk) 14:26, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

Also, the phrase "has often acted as" in the hook is passive voice and thus a little dull. Can you tighten up that hook a bit so it's a bit more "hooky" and attention-grabbing? Perhaps something like "has been the" or other more peppy wording? (Don't have to use my suggestion, but I can't propose a new lead for you lest we then require a second reviewer...). Montanabw^(talk) 03:59, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

I see what you mean! How about ALT1 above? HazelAB (talk) 14:26, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

Or ALT2, which might be hookier because it mentions the Arctic in conjunction with golf?HazelAB (talk)

Wikilinks OK, I think I was reviewing two articles at once and got them mixed up! Sorry! I like 'ALT2 Good to go! Montanabw^(talk) 09:14, 1 February 2015 (UTC)