Template:Did you know nominations/San Francisco Sentinel

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:38, 15 October 2011 (UTC)

San Francisco Sentinel

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• ... that John B. Anderson wrote in the San Francisco Sentinel that he would ban sexual orientation discrimination in the federal government if elected president?

• Reviewed: Frank Stalletto

Created/expanded by Binksternet (talk). Self nom at 17:52, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

• I know you asked me to come in to suggest a more interesting hook, but I think this is fine - it seems to be one of the most important things in the paper's history. I think a slight alteration in phrasing could convey that he was actually a candidate though, rather than this being totally a hypothetical; maybe ALT1: ... that presidential candidate John B. Anderson wrote in the San Francisco Sentinel that, if elected, he would ban sexual orientation discrimination in the federal government?

Everything else checks out, good to go. (I would, however, remove the bit about Good Time Harry - the brief background on other papers called the SF Sentinel is fine, but a fictional paper having nothing in common but the name, on a show that aired only five episodes, is unnecessary; the article's more than long enough without it.) –Roscelese (talk ⋅ contribs) 08:15, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Your ALT1 looks good. I will comment out the Good Time Harry bits and consider deletion. Binksternet (talk) 16:53, 8 October 2011 (UTC)