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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:41, 5 September 2019 (UTC)

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Samragyee RL Shah

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Shah in 2017
Shah in 2017

5x expanded by CAPTAIN MEDUSA (talk). Self-nominated at 12:01, 28 June 2019 (UTC).

  • The article was more than 5x expanded and has no copyright violations. Everything is reliable cited including the hook. The hook is interesting. A QPQ is still needed. SL93 (talk) 18:25, 24 July 2019 (UTC)
The article also probably needs a copyedit: I can see some typo errors and awkwardly-constructed phrases in the article, such as In 2019, Shah is currently working on Maruni, where will be portraying a role of trans woman. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 23:55, 24 July 2019 (UTC)
I've done some cleanup; there are a couple of awkward phrasings that are quoted as given. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 20:33, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • SL93, have your issues been addressed now, and have Narutolovehinata5's as well? It's been nearly three weeks since the review began; it would be nice to know where things stand. Thanks for taking another look. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:02, 14 August 2019 (UTC)
The first sentence of the "Early life and personal life" section could be reworded. "Shah was born on... She was born to..."; those sentences could probably be combined. There's also a missing space before "The film became a huge box office success". The quote Shah was ranked tenth in the list "Top 10 Women and Men of the Year" sounds weird to me, but I'm not very familiar with Indian English grammar so I'm not sure if that's how such sentences are worded in Nepal. The phrase "but Gurung left the project after Shah overtook her" needs to be clarified: overtook in terms of what? Finally, the mention of the film Rato Teeka Nidharma: has that film been released yet? It's in the 2018 section but that part is still in the future tense. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 04:03, 15 August 2019 (UTC)
Narutolovehinata5,  Done i've fixed the error's raised above.___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 11:12, 16 August 2019 (UTC)
I don't think I've heard the wording "overtook her lead role in a film" before. Perhaps that part could be reworded? The article looks better now, but I think it would still be a good idea to request a copyedit of the article over at WP:GOCE. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 04:38, 19 August 2019 (UTC)
  • I've requested for a copyedit over at WP:GOCE/R; the nomination should be good to go once that has been accomplished. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:01, 22 August 2019 (UTC)
Per a discussion over at WP:GOCE/R's talk page, no further copyedit will be necessary. I also note that the article has now been nominated for GAN, though as the article already met expansion requirements when it was first nominated. I don't see anymore problems so I think we should be good to go now. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 01:55, 23 August 2019 (UTC)
  • The hook is rather pedestrian. Yoninah (talk) 12:53, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
I personally thought the hook was okay, though I can see why others may disagree. @CAPTAIN MEDUSA and Yoninah: How about:
ALT1 ... that as of 2019, Samragyee RL Shah (pictured) is the highest-paid Nepali actress?
Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 20:08, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
By the way, I note that there's an image that's currently in the article: would it be okay to include that in the nomination? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 20:10, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
  • I like ALT1, though I might change it to "the highest-paid actress in Nepali cinema". The image stands out even without a hook ;). What do you think, CAPTAIN MEDUSA? Yoninah (talk) 20:51, 28 August 2019 (UTC)
  • @Yoninah: I liked your suggestion. The image does stand out, couldn't agree more with you ;).___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 22:08, 28 August 2019 (UTC)
I have just read the article, in preparation for approving the hook. I have deleted from the first para of the lede the sentence "She is also one of the highest-paid actresses in Nepali cinema." The second para already says "Shah is the highest-paid actress in the Nepali film industry", and puts it in context.
I have a question about how the currency is indicated. The article consistently uses the Nepalese symbol रू for the Nepalese rupee, and on the first use, links it to Nepalese rupee. However, MOS:CURRENCY says "If there is no common English abbreviation or symbol, follow the ISO 4217 standard." That would be NPR. It does also say "Link the first occurrence of lesser-known currencies", and gives the example of the Mongolian tögrög. While the symbol रू is linked to the article, I think it would be clearer and more consistent with the MOS to say firstly "Nepalese rupees 16 lakhs (1,600,000)", and thereafter eg "NPR25,000 cash prize". CAPTAIN MEDUSA, how does that sound to you?
As for ALT1a, it is supported by a citation to a source that looks reasonably reliable, so can be approved, but I think it would be good to clarify the representations of currency before it is finally approved. RebeccaGreen (talk) 08:36, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
ALT1A approved. Thank you, CAPTAIN MEDUSA! RebeccaGreen (talk) 10:02, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
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