Template:Did you know nominations/SS Principessa Mafalda

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The result was: rejected by Panyd^{The muffin is not subtle} 23:09, 12 September 2012 (UTC)

SS Principessa Mafalda

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... that the SS Principessa Mafalda (pictured) sank in 1927 with the loss of 314 lives, in a tragedy that has been compared to the Titanic and the Costa Concordia disasters?

Reviewed: Martin Petzold

Created/expanded by Ultracobalt (talk). Self nom at 15:04, 15 August 2012 (UTC)

I will review this

New article, >7500 characters
Cited inline
I think the image copyrights are okay
Hook is short enough and definitely interesting, and cited
QPQ satisfied

More review to come. Chris857 (talk) 00:53, 22 August 2012 (UTC)

I did not detect any copyvio

ISSUES/SUGGESTIONS:

"di Riva Trigoso with her sister, the SS Principessa Jolanda" should this maybe be "di Riva Trigoso with her sistership, the SS Principessa Jolanda"? I don't know if there is a preference in the ship world.
The ref "In 1926: Living on the Edge of Time" does not seem to cover everything in paragraph 2 of #Early history. (The Louis XVI style and "faded luxury" are verified in that source)
Could we have a ref for the first paragraph of #The last voyage and the first paragraph of #Aftermath
Could we have a ref at the end of the paragraph that ends "However, panic began to spread among both passengers and crew."

Chris857 (talk) 22:35, 23 August 2012 (UTC)

Comment - It's a poor hook, too long winded, gives too much away. You just need enough to entice the reader, something like- ALT1: ... that the SS Principessa Mafalda has been dubbed the Italian Titanic? This way, the reader clicks through to find out why it has been so named. - hahnch e n 00:58, 24 August 2012 (UTC)

The nominator has not responded in 12 days, despite a talk page request. Giving a little more time because of an apparent editing hiatus from Wikipedia. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:06, 5 September 2012 (UTC)