Template:Did you know nominations/Prized Apart

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 20:35, 22 July 2015 (UTC)

Prized Apart

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• ... that Prized Apart has been berated for its carbon footprint?

Created by Launchballer (talk). Self-nominated at 20:01, 13 June 2015 (UTC).

• New enough, length is ok, but I feel like the article can be more interesting. To me it is actually very difficult to picture what the show is about despite having read this article. Perhaps it is because the show is so new? I would suggest having a "background" section of how the show came to be, and perhaps make the prose a bit more crisp in the article body. Colipon+(Talk) 16:55, 18 June 2015 (UTC)

I've added a background section. The one edit you made, the previous wording was correct - I've added multiple sources to that effect.--Launchballer 15:26, 19 June 2015 (UTC)

I'm sorry, maybe I am just a bit "strict" about these things, but I feel like you need to ask for a copy-edit before this one is ready for prime time. There's some fairly awkward turns of phrase , use of contractions, and generally the article is just too "colloquial"-sounding to be encyclopedic. Examples of phrases that can use some rework include: "though they can't pick the category picked already", "Unlike other game shows, this one was developed in the UK", "the format jumped out at her", "unless one of the contestants are at the gate" (wrong grammar). Colipon+(Talk) 15:48, 19 June 2015 (UTC)

Removed contractions, fixed the four phrases listed here and requested a copyedit here. They are undergoing a June blitz focusing on requests starting tomorrow, so it's unlikely to take long.--Launchballer 15:37, 20 June 2015 (UTC)

Done.--Launchballer 09:39, 21 June 2015 (UTC)

Looks much better, thanks for your efforts. I would say the only thing now is to work on a blurb. An alternative suggestion might be "British reality TV show Prized Apart was criticized for its high carbon footprint?" Colipon+(Talk) 16:16, 21 June 2015 (UTC)

Funny looking reality show. ALT1: ... that BBC1 game show Prized Apart has been lambasted for its high carbon footprint?--Launchballer 11:42, 25 June 2015 (UTC)

• This article is new enough and long enough, and even bang up to date with the latest episode. The ALT1 hook is cited inline and I have struck the original hook. The article seems sufficiently complete, it is neutral and I didn't find any close paraphrasing. (PS. I hate the expression "loved ones" and think that "family" is so much better.) Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:38, 19 July 2015 (UTC)

Loved ones is actually the phrase Willis uses but I've changed it - better?--Launchballer 09:15, 19 July 2015 (UTC)

• Are there any sources for the charts? Yoninah (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2015 (UTC)

There are now, although I didn't write those charts - an IP created them. It'll be interesting to see how (s)he interprets the addition of references and if (s)he's intelligent enough to follow the trail of referencing.--Launchballer 00:13, 20 July 2015 (UTC)

• Thank you. Restoring tick per Cwmhiraeth's review. Yoninah (talk) 01:18, 20 July 2015 (UTC)

• Returned from prep 3. Sorry, but I was unable to confirm the hook for this one. I found only one reliable source that mentions the carbon footprint, but it doesn't specifically criticize it. Gatoclass (talk) 12:11, 20 July 2015 (UTC)

Try the new TVBites reference which replaced the Mirror reference (not too sure why that was there). The Metro and Irish Examiner 'sample' tweets which berate the footprint.--Launchballer 14:55, 20 July 2015 (UTC)

I saw the samples, but tweets from random users are not reliable sources, what you really need is a reliable source commenting on the tweets. TVBites is a personal blog, so that doesn't really qualify either. Gatoclass (talk) 01:35, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

ALT1: ... that BBC game show Prized Apart involves contestants being flown to Morocco and back every week?

Would I need to state the fact that it is from Morocco to the UK?--Launchballer 16:36, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

ALT1 looks fine to me, I don't think you need to mention the UK as "BBC" probably makes that evident enough. I haven't time to formally verify the hook ATM, but maybe someone else can do so in the meantime. Gatoclass (talk) 18:16, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

On second thoughts, ALT1 looks incorrect because it appears contestants are only flown to Morocco once, with some being flown back each week, so you may want to rephrase it a bit. Gatoclass (talk) 18:26, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

ALT2: ... that BBC game show Prized Apart involves losing contestants being flown to Morocco and back every week?--Launchballer 20:13, 21 July 2015 (UTC)

• Actually, ALT1 looks fine after all as I didn't realize contestants were returned to Morocco after winning the quiz in Britain. AGF verified. Gatoclass (talk) 02:51, 22 July 2015 (UTC)