Template:Did you know nominations/Poultry feed

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 11:46, 12 November 2012 (UTC)

Poultry feed

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... that chickens are fed with tiny rocks?

Reviewed: Sejm of the Estates

Created/expanded by Xanchester (talk). Self nom at 17:57, 8 November 2012 (UTC)

Date of creation is fine (7 November), length is fine (1760 characters), and the hook is reliably sourced, clearly cited, and interesting. Note: the source does not use the term "tiny rocks" but does talk about small pieces of granite, so that seems to be a fair paraphrase.
Personally I would expand the hook slightly to something like "that chickens are fed tiny rocks as part of their diet to aid digestion?" Or "that chickens are fed tiny pieces of granite as part of their diet to aid digestion?" But yours is punchier, so in that sense it's better. SlimVirgin ^(talk) 21:34, 9 November 2012 (UTC)

Thank you for the review and for improving the article. I'm vigilant about avoiding close paraphrasing, so the word order and sentence structure are different, but hopefully the meaning is still the same (the source refers to it as "small pieces of a hard substance eaten by a chicken to aid digestion... inert grit, such as granite grit, gets ground up rather slowly, in the process furnishing minor amounts of trace mineral"). The brevity of the hook was intended to make it more interesting, but I also like the alternatives that you have suggested.--xanchester (t) 22:00, 9 November 2012 (UTC)

I do like your brevity. It was what made me want to review the nomination, and I think DYK readers will want to look at the article for the same reason. It's up to you -- I'd be fine with any of the three hooks. SlimVirgin ^(talk) 22:19, 9 November 2012 (UTC)