Template:Did you know nominations/Pombo Musical

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 14:43, 9 February 2015 (UTC)

Pombo Musical

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~~... that Pombo Musical is a compilation of poems and fables done musical album?~~

ALT1:... that Pombo Musical is a children's album that mixes rock and Colombian folk genres?
ALT2:... that Pombo Musical won a Latin Grammy as Best Latin Children's Album in 2008?

Created by Luisnh1210 (talk). Self nominated at 05:12, 6 January 2015 (UTC).

Reviewed:

The article length, date of expansion and copyvio check all are fine. Hooks are appropriately cited. Both hooks are interesting.--Miguelemejia (talk) 21:14, 6 January 2015 (UTC)

The original hook doesn't make sense. Is it supposed to be "done as a musical album" or something like that? MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 22:04, 6 January 2015 (UTC)

I don't see the ambiguity. If you talk about Madonna's album what can of album do you think they are talking to? of course is a musical album; hence the title Pombo Musical. I like the the first hook over the second alternative since the first hook makes reference to the title and the poems of Rafael Pombo that inspire it.--Miguelemejia (talk) 19:13, 7 January 2015 (UTC)

Your inability to see that the hook as written doesn't make sense made me wonder about how closely you perused the article. After just a quick glance, I see that the article is in desperate need of copyediting. The very first sentence is a mess. After seeing that, I skipped to the first sentence of the second paragraph, which is even worse. It's barely comprehensible: "After the finish the promotion of his last studio album El Rock de Mi Pueblo (2004), Carlos Vives finish his discographic contract with EMI Latin, fact that motivates to take a hiatus of his career and decide to concentrate in support to local artists and follow his career as producer and songwriter." I looked at a few other random sentences, which were about as bad, and I couldn't stand to read any more. They were enough to determine that the article in its current state is not ready to be linked to from the Main Page. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 12:29, 8 January 2015 (UTC)

@Mandarax: I'm not involved in this article but have done quick copyedit of it. I do have to disclose that I don't understand Spanish so article creators are free to revert if I wrote something wrong. Hope that helps. Also an alternate hook:

ALT3:... that the children's album Pombo Musical is based on fables written by Colombian poet Rafael Pombo? Cowlibob (talk) 19:40, 8 January 2015 (UTC)

Thank you very much, Cowlibob. That made a huge difference. I just did a quick skim, and I see that you actually made the article readable. I've removed the {{copy edit}} tag which I had added. As far as I'm concerned, the nomination can proceed. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 00:46, 9 January 2015 (UTC)

Full review needed now that article has been copyedited; also, struck original hook (ungrammatical), leaving ALTs to be checked in review. BlueMoonset (talk) 23:39, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

This article is new enough and long enough. The ALT3 hook is acceptable and has an inline citation. The article is neutral, but with many of the sources being in Spanish, I was unable to assess whether there was any close paraphrasing. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:06, 9 February 2015 (UTC)