Template:Did you know nominations/Newyorkitis
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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:26, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
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Newyorkitis
- ... that a prominent surgeon wrote a book in 1901 describing a condition he called Newyorkitis, a series of maladies caused by the stress of living in Manhattan? Source: Lapham's Quarterly, February 2020 https://www.laphamsquarterly.org/roundtable/inflammation-place
Created by Coretheapple (talk). Self-nominated at 19:13, 17 February 2020 (UTC).
— Article was created during the last seven days and contains a sufficient prose length. It is well-sourced throughout with proper citations, neutral, and has no apparent copyvio issues. The hook is interesting, short enough, neutral/accurate, and backed by a source. QPQ has been done. This one is good to go. Aria1561 (talk) 02:26, 18 February 2020 (UTC)
We need an expert like EEng to make something better out of this hook. Yoninah (talk) 21:17, 22 February 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1
... that John H. Girdner identified nearsightedness (caused by omnipresent buildings) as a symptom of Newyorkitis, and a colleague wrote that female mental activity caused nervousness in urban dwellers? - EEng 00:03, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1
- Works for me---maybe adding the date for clarity. "that in 1901, John H..." etc . Thanks. Coretheapple (talk) 17:17, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
- Wanted to, but it's already just a few characters short of the 200-byte limit. EEng 18:58, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
- OK, just for you I've made the effort:
- ALT1a ... that in 1901, John Girdner identified nearsightedness (caused by omnipresent buildings) as a symptom of Newyorkitis, and a colleague wrote that female mental activity induced nervousness in urbanites?
- (199 chars) EEng 19:00, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
- Outstanding! Coretheapple (talk) 19:44, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you, EEng, but I was hoping for something snappier for the quirky slot. Like:
- ALT2: ... that the symptoms of Newyorkitis include "haste, rudeness, arrogance, pursuit of novelty and of grandeur, and pretensions of omniscience"?
- ALT3: ... that according to prominent New York surgeon John Girdner, Manhattan's omnipresent buildings and noise cause a physical disease called Newyorkitis?
- ALT4: ... that in 1908, treatment for the symptoms of Newyorkitis was being offered at a New York YMCA?
- Yoninah (talk) 20:43, 29 February 2020 (UTC)
- Outstanding! Coretheapple (talk) 19:44, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
- Works for me---maybe adding the date for clarity. "that in 1901, John H..." etc . Thanks. Coretheapple (talk) 17:17, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
* Alt 3 describes "Newyorkitis" best, but I would add a reference to 1901. Coretheapple (talk) 15:35, 3 March 2020 (UTC)
- Since parentheses are frowned on in DYK hooks (see WP:DYKSG#C9), I'm proposing a variant combining ALT1a hook with ALT2 (ALT5) to stay focused on Girdner's book, and an ALT3a to address Coretheapple's issue:
- ALT3a: ... that according to John Girdner, a prominent New York surgeon in 1901, Manhattan's omnipresent buildings and noise cause a physical disease called Newyorkitis?
- ALT5: ... that in 1901, John Girdner identified nearsightedness, caused by omnipresent buildings, as one symptom of Newyorkitis, with others being "haste, rudeness, arrogance" and "pretensions of omniscience"?
- ALT5 is 199 prose characters; one of the trio of "haste, rudeness, arrogance" could be removed to trim the length a bit. BlueMoonset (talk) 23:58, 6 March 2020 (UTC)
- Why not replace "omnipresent" with "looming" buildings, per source? And "a symptom" instead of "one sympton"? Cuts down on the characters. Adding "Dr."
- ALT6: ... that in 1901, Dr. John Girdner identified nearsightedness, caused by looming buildings, as a symptom of Newyorkitis, with others being "haste, rudeness, arrogance" and "pretensions of omniscience"?
- Coretheapple (talk) 21:09, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
- ALT6 has too many commas. It also says everything in one line, making it unnecessary to click on the article. Yoninah (talk) 21:18, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
- OK, Yoninah, how about
- ALT 7 * ... that in 1901, a noted surgeon identified Newyorkitis, caused by living in Manhattan, whose symptoms included haste, rudeness, and "pretensions of omniscience"?
- '--Coretheapple (talk) 04:01, 17 March 2020 (UTC)
- ALT 8 * ... that in 1901, noted surgeon John Girdner identified Newyorkitis, caused by living in Manhattan, whose symptoms included haste, rudeness, and "pretensions of omniscience"? --evrik (talk) 05:06, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
- ALT6 has too many commas. It also says everything in one line, making it unnecessary to click on the article. Yoninah (talk) 21:18, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
- Coretheapple (talk) 21:09, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
New reviewer needed to check the ALT hooks and see whether any are suitable. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 22:15, 3 April 2020 (UTC)- I gave this article a full review. I find ALT4 to be the best, as it is short and quirky. Approving for ALT4.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 23:12, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
