Template:Did you know nominations/Mount Carmel East

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:30, 24 May 2018 (UTC)

Mount Carmel East

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~~... that the land that is now Mount Carmel East was originally used as a farm that provided food for another hospital, Mount Carmel West?~~
ALT1: ... that Mount Carmel East sits on land that was originally used as a farm that provided food for another hospital, Mount Carmel West? Mount Carmel Health

Reviewed: Pinewood Hospital
Comment: Open to any other hooks that people think could be better

Improved to Good Article status by Sixflashphoto (talk). Self-nominated at 05:30, 11 May 2018 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook eligibility:

Cited:
Interesting:
Other problems: - I'd reword the hook to emphasize that the land on which the hospital sits was the farm, not the hospital itself.

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Sounder Bruce 04:57, 12 May 2018 (UTC)

Good Idea. -- Sixflashphoto (talk) 13:55, 12 May 2018 (UTC)

Looks good, but I think the hook could be rewritten a bit to flow better: ... that Mount Carmel East sits on land that was originally used as a farm that provided food for another hospital, Mount Carmel West? Sounder Bruce 20:28, 13 May 2018 (UTC)

@SounderBruce: Good idea for the hook, thank you! -- Sixflashphoto (talk) 03:29, 14 May 2018 (UTC)