Template:Did you know nominations/Mihran Mesrobian

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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 00:07, 18 November 2014 (UTC)

Mihran Mesrobian

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~~... that though architect Mihran Mesrobian (pictured) lost fifteen members of his family during the Armenian Genocide, he went on to build many historically listed buildings?~~

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5x expanded by EtienneDolet (talk). Self nominated at 07:58, 13 November 2014 (UTC).

Sorry to be mean, but this is one of these hooks like, "Footballer X was born in City Y but ate apples in City Z." It's kind of an anticlimax. EEng (talk) 23:34, 13 November 2014 (UTC)

ALT1: ... that architect Mihran Mesrobian (pictured), designer of many historically listed buildings in the United States, lost fifteen members of his family during the Armenian Genocide?

I agree, I've added ALT1. Étienne Dolet (talk) 00:31, 14 November 2014 (UTC)

ALT1 is a big improvement. EEng (talk) 00:45, 14 November 2014 (UTC)

All checks out, 5x expansion, well written and clearly referenced with no obvious copyvios. GTG with ALT1. Jack1956 (talk) 13:37, 15 November 2014 (UTC)

This is about as interesting as saying that someone living in the U.S. lost relatives in the Holocaust back in Europe. How about:
ALT2: ... that Armenian-American architect Mihran Mesrobian (pictured) renovated palaces in the Ottoman Empire and designed hotels in Washington, D.C.? Yoninah (talk) 23:03, 16 November 2014 (UTC)

Yes, much better. EEng (talk) 23:30, 16 November 2014 (UTC)

OK then, GTG with ALT2 Jack1956 (talk) 23:53, 16 November 2014 (UTC)