Template:Did you know nominations/Melati Suryodarmo
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 00:08, 11 September 2020 (UTC)
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Melati Suryodarmo
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Performance artist Melati Suryodarmo
- ... that Melati Suryodarmo (pictured) went viral after dancing on butter? Source: "Indonesian performance artist Melati Suryodarmo gained YouTube notoriety when a version of her 'Exergie — butter dance' was posted to the website"
- ALT1:... that Indonesian performance artist Melati Suryodarmo (pictured) went viral after dancing on butter? Source: "Indonesian performance artist Melati Suryodarmo gained YouTube notoriety when a version of her 'Exergie — butter dance' was posted to the website"
- Reviewed: Cliché verre
Created by Gobonobo (talk). Self-nominated at 05:03, 6 September 2020 (UTC).
- Article length and date are good, as is neutrality and referencing.
Too-close paraphrasing was a close call, deciding in favor of "not a problem."QPQ complete. The image is public domain; too bad it does not show the butter dance. The hooks are good, the only difference between them being whether we name her nationality and career. Which one is more hooky? I think not naming is more mysterious, so I prefer the top hook. Binksternet (talk) 08:21, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
@Binksternet: Close paraphrasing is just that—lifting phrases and sentences from the source without quoting them. Close paraphrasing can also refer to sentences that follow the source line by line, with slight rearrangement or tweaking of the words. In this case, there is close paraphrasing from the sources that must be rewritten in the page creator's own words:- Source: In 2003, Suryodarmo and her classmates performed as living installations at the opening of the 50th Venice Biennale.
- Article: At the opening of the 50th Venice Biennale in 2003, Suryodarmo and her classmates performed as living installations
- Source: In a two-hour performance, Suryodarmo lies in between a stack of 18 mattresses, with only her head exposed.
- Article: she lies in between a stack of 18 mattresses for two hours with only her head exposed.
- Source: She slips and falls to the ground repeatedly
- Article: she repeatedly slips and falls to the ground
- Source: such as feelings of alienation when she moved to Germany and her first experience eating butter
- Article: Suryodarmo drew on the feeling of alienation she felt upon moving to Germany and her first experience eating butter.
- Yoninah (talk) 09:35, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
- Ouch. Thanks for the detailed comparison. I'm striking my approval check and asking for a thorough rewrite. Binksternet (talk) 09:43, 7 September 2020 (UTC)
- Article length and date are good, as is neutrality and referencing.
Okay, all the copyvio problems have been removed or drastically rewritten. The article is now in compliance. Binksternet (talk) 16:46, 9 September 2020 (UTC)
