Template:Did you know nominations/Mary Treglia
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The result was: promoted by Z1720 (talk) 02:42, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
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Mary Treglia
... that social worker Mary Treglia, who helped immigrants in Sioux City, Iowa, was initiated by "baseball and ravioli dinners" rather than a "baptism by fire"?
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5x expanded by SL93 (talk). Self-nominated at 03:22, 4 May 2021 (UTC).
It's expanded properly, no plagiarism etc., new enough--but I'm not totally getting it. First of all the article is somewhat unusually organized; it's odd to have a biography like this with a "personal life". Regular chronology seems much more helpful to me, especially since the Career part kind of comes out of nowhere (and I find the lead a bit odd as well, starting with what seems to be a mere factoid about baseball, which doesn't become relevant until the last section). But above all I don't get the hook--SL93, it's not very hooky, it's not very clear, and after having looked at the source I'm not sure what more can be pulled out of this to make it more exciting. Drmies (talk) 01:05, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Drmies: I changed it to chronological order.
- ALT1: ... that social worker Mary Treglia died before the "ironically" named Mary J. Treglia Urban Renewal Project razed the Sioux City, Iowa neighborhood of immigrants who she helped during her life? SL93 (talk) 01:18, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
I'm fine with it, though it is possible that somewhere along the line someone might have a problem with "ironically". Drmies (talk) 01:36, 5 May 2021 (UTC)