Template:Did you know nominations/Mary Ellen Edmunds
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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 09:59, 28 May 2016 (UTC)
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Mary Ellen Edmunds
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Mary Ellen Edmunds
... that Mary Ellen Edmunds (pictured) was the first female missionary from the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints to serve in the Philippines and Indonesia?
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... that Mary Ellen Edmunds (pictured) served four missions for the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints in countries including Taiwan and Indonesia? - Reviewed: I Get This Call Every Day
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Created by Amgisseman(BYU) (talk). Self-nominated at 21:32, 10 May 2016 (UTC).
New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done. Image is freely licensed. Regarding the hook, the first hook is good, but women's "firsts" hooks are a little trite and also don't tell us much about the subject. What do you think about something a little more hooky?- ALT2: ... that LDS missionary Mary Ellen Edmunds (pictured) writes inspiring and humorous books on living a happier life, including Thoughts for a Bad Hair Day and MEE Speaks: But Does She Have Anything to Say? Yoninah (talk) 18:52, 22 May 2016 (UTC)
- That hook is fine. Thanks for reviewing my article. Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 19:03, 23 May 2016 (UTC)
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- The trouble with the ALT2 hook is that the source for the bibliography is dated 2002 and the second book was published in 2008. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:07, 24 May 2016 (UTC)
- Most of the books have URLs to Google Books. But if you want to stick to the ones that are in the cite, we could just write:
- ALT3: ... that LDS missionary Mary Ellen Edmunds (pictured) writes inspiring and humorous books on living a happier life, such as Thoughts for a Bad Hair Day? Yoninah (talk) 12:14, 24 May 2016 (UTC)
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- That hook is fine. Thanks for reviewing my article. Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 19:03, 23 May 2016 (UTC)
Searching for the title of each book produces results. ALT3 is certainly OK but ALT2 is better if the need for an inline citation for the title of the book is deemed unnecessary. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:18, 26 May 2016 (UTC)
