Template:Did you know nominations/Marie-Jeanne

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The result was: promoted by MeegsC (talk) 17:22, 20 May 2021 (UTC)

Marie-Jeanne

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... that ballerina Marie-Jeanne entered School of American Ballet two days after seeing a ballet performance for the first time? Source: "She had no encounter with ballet until New Year’s Eve, 1933, when her mother ignored her wish to see a Walt Disney film and literally dragged her, she said, to see de Basil’s Ballet Russe. A programme containing Les Sylphides and Balanchine’s Cotillon, with Danilova and the so-called baby ballerinas dancing, convinced her at once that “that was it”, and two days later she entered Balanchine’s School of American Ballet, then just opening." ([1])
- ALT1:... that Marie-Jeanne, one of the first dancers trained at George Balanchine's School of American Ballet, was a founding member of his New York City Ballet? Source: "Marie-Jeanne, an American ballerina long associated with George Balanchine and a member of the New York City Ballet during its first season, died on Friday in Austin, Tex... It so excited her that two days later she persuaded her parents to enroll her at the School of American Ballet, which had just been founded by Balanchine and the arts patron Lincoln Kirstein." ([2])

Reviewed: Fight for You (H.E.R. song)

Converted from a redirect by Corachow (talk). Self-nominated at 13:53, 3 May 2021 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy compliance:

Adequate sourcing:
Neutral:
Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing: - See below
Other problems: - For the sentence She was born on her family's kitchen table as her mother went into labor while preparing dinner., it appears her father was preparing the dinner. It's a shame because that would've been a good hook. On that note, a couple sentences in "Early life" and "Personal life" stick out to me as paraphrasing that is somewhat too close for comfort to the source.

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: @Corachow: Good work on this page. There are just a few concerns I had about close paraphrasing, as well as something being slightly inaccurate to the source. Epicgenius (talk) 19:05, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

@Epicgenius: I corrected the part about her birth, that was a mistake on my part. I did not include it as a hook because I feel like it downgrades her achievement as a ballet dancer. I also rephrased a few sentences. Corachow (talk) 19:14, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

@Corachow: Thanks for the quick response. I understood why you did not nominate the hook about being born on a kitchen table. The two hooks you proposed are fine on their own, but I had also found that interesting personally. In regard to the other issues, they are now resolved, so I will approve these.

Epicgenius (talk) 19:27, 5 May 2021 (UTC)