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Round symbols for illustrating comments about the DYK nomination The following is an archived discussion of Lynn D. Stewart's DYK nomination. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page; such as this archived nomination"s (talk) page, the nominated article's (talk) page, or the Did you knowDYK comment symbol (talk) page. Unless there is consensus to re-open the archived discussion here. No further edits should be made to this page. See the talk page guidelines for (more) information.

The result was: promoted by Carabinieri (talk) 00:25, 6 March 2013 (UTC).

Lynn D. Stewart

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  • Comment: New article about the founder of Hooters

Created/expanded by GenQuest (talk). Self nom at 07:33, 2 February 2013 (UTC)

  • Length and date verified. The article needs a copy edit, and one paragraph is not referenced. - PM800 (talk) 20:18, 2 February 2013 (UTC)
  • The article still has grammar issues and wording that is not encyclopedic. - PM800 (talk) 01:28, 3 February 2013 (UTC)
  • I don't see that anything has been done to address the grammar and encyclopedic issues. Perhaps a request to the Guild of Copy Editors could be made, if GenQuest can't identify the problematic spots? It's been three weeks since the above; some progress needs to be made before it becomes four weeks/one month. I'll ping GenQuest's talk page. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:24, 24 February 2013 (UTC)
  • I did a thorough copyedit, removed POV language, and formatted all the references. I added 3 "citation needed" tags which need to be taken care of. As I checked all the references, I did not find close paraphrasing issues. The article is new enough, long enough, and well-sourced. The hook, however, is not hooky. It could be revised this way:
  • ALT1: ... that Lynn D. Stewart, co-founder of Hooters restaurants, played offensive guard for the University of Illinois' Fighting Illini, which won the 1964 Rose Bowl?
  • If this fact can be sourced in the article, it would make a good hook for April Fools' Day:
  • ALT2: ... that Lynn D. Stewart and five others opened the first Hooters restaurant on April Fools' Day because they were sure they would fail at the venture? Yoninah (talk) 23:44, 28 February 2013 (UTC)
  • I will find the source for ALT 2 and in-line it at that point. Thanks for the copyedit, Yoninah, as my request to the GOCE was languishing. GenQuest "Talk to Me" 02:33, 1 March 2013 (UTC)
  • ALT2 hook ref verified. As I'm unable to approve my own hook, could another reviewer finish this up so we can get it into the queue for April Fools' Day? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 17:31, 2 March 2013 (UTC)
  • Don't think the source for the hook ("fail" part, current note 7) can be considered an WP:RS. Also it seems unlikely they were really "sure they would fail" - more of a joke I expect. Johnbod (talk) 15:06, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
  • OK. What about ALT1? Yoninah (talk) 16:35, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
  • Ok to go with ALT1. Source is a football team website, but I'll accept that for college ball. Rest ok. Johnbod (talk) 17:13, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
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