Template:Did you know nominations/Lucy Burwell Page Saunders
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 17:18, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
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Lucy Burwell Page Saunders
... that Lucy Burwell Page Saunders' novel Dora Lee features a French-speaking macaw named Fanchon who attacks three different characters in eight pages?Source: "Saunders undoubtedly used Polly as the model for Fanchon, a French-speaking macaw who attacks three characters within the span of eight pages."[1])
Created by Gamaliel (talk). Self-nominated at 16:49, 30 December 2020 (UTC).
- Reviewed Jackie Saccoccio. Gamaliel (talk) 17:15, 30 December 2020 (UTC)
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| Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems |
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| Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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| QPQ: Done. |
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Article about 2800 characters; hook about 150 characters. Article was created fewer than seven days prior to the nomination. Hook has been verified and is of general interest. QPQ has been checked. Good work! Extraordinary Writ (talk) 04:36, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Hi, this hook does not satisfy WP:DYKSG#C6. Maybe add more of the real-life background. Yoninah (talk) 23:51, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
How about this? Gamaliel (talk) 00:22, 8 January 2021 (UTC)
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... that Lucy Burwell Page Saunders' novel Dora Lee features a French-speaking macaw named Fanchon, based on the parrot owned by James and Dolley Madison, who attacks three different characters in eight pages? Source: "Saunders undoubtedly used Polly as the model for Fanchon, a French-speaking macaw who attacks three characters within the span of eight pages."[2]) Gamaliel (talk) 00:22, 8 January 2021 (UTC) - I apologize for missing that. The alternate is a bit long - I count 205 characters - and I'm not sure it reads smoothly enough. You might remove "James Madison" (it appears to have been Dolley's parrot) and/or "French-speaking". I am also advised that the names of novels are supposed to be avoided if there is no article already written about them. Alternatively, it might be easier to write a hook about her being the youngest of twenty children. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 00:57, 8 January 2021 (UTC)
- Or this? ALT2:
... that Lucy Burwell Page Saunders' novel Dora Lee features a French-speaking macaw named Fanchon, based on Dolley Madison's parrot, who attacks three different characters in eight pages? Source: "Saunders undoubtedly used Polly as the model for Fanchon, a French-speaking macaw who attacks three characters within the span of eight pages."[3]) Gamaliel (talk) 15:34, 8 January 2021 (UTC) - I think "inspired by" would be clearer than "based on", and I also added "pet"; let me know if you disagree. I don't think there's any way to write a hook without the novel's name (believe me, I've tried), so I'm prepared to approve the hook below. (I confess I don't see the purpose of that "rule".) Once I have your sign-off, I'll complete the formalities. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:25, 9 January 2021 (UTC)
- ALT3: ... that Lucy Burwell Page Saunders' novel Dora Lee features a French-speaking macaw named Fanchon, inspired by Dolley Madison's pet parrot, who attacks three different characters in eight pages? Source: "Saunders undoubtedly used Polly as the model for Fanchon, a French-speaking macaw who attacks three characters within the span of eight pages."[4]):* Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:25, 9 January 2021 (UTC)
ALT3 is now approved. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 23:55, 10 January 2021 (UTC)