Template:Did you know nominations/Loom (band)

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 12:15, 28 August 2015 (UTC)

Loom (band)

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~~... that Tarik Badwan, the vocalist of LOOM, has been called "the angriest man to stalk a stage in ages and the owner of the best death stare London"?~~
... that Tarik Badwan, the vocalist of LOOM, has been called "the angriest man to stalk a stage in ages"?
- (Strikeout of original hook not by nominator, but by me as a reviewer, for the problem noted in my comment further below. —Lowellian (reply) 15:21, 18 August 2015 (UTC))

Reviewed: Royal Castle (restaurant chain)

Moved to mainspace by Sovereign Sentinel (talk). Self-nominated at 17:02, 14 August 2015 (UTC).

Article moved to mainspace on August 14. Hook is referenced, short, and interesting enough. QPQ done. This is good to go! -- Frankie _talk 09:59, 15 August 2015 (UTC)

"The owner of the best death stare London" doesn't make grammatical sense; it's missing the word "in". This is a direct quote, with the same grammatical error in the source. As this is a direct quote, the correction must be in square brackets, which is okay for the original article but not the most attractive feature for a DYK hook ("the owner of the best death stare [sic: in] London"), so I suggest simply shortening the hook to just the first half of the quote ("the angriest man to stalk a stage in ages"), which is already plenty interesting enough on its own. I've accordingly stricken out the original hook above. —Lowellian (reply) 15:21, 18 August 2015 (UTC)