Template:Did you know nominations/Lobet Gott in seinen Reichen, BWV 11
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 21:49, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
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Lobet Gott in seinen Reichen, BWV 11
[edit]... that Bach composed his Ascension Oratorio after his Christmas Oratorio, richly scored for the same forces including three trumpets and timpani, and similarly concluding with a chorale fantasia?
- Reviewed: Hedwig Kettler
- Comment: please before Pentecost, sorry for being late for Ascension Day
Improved to Good Article status by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 16:09, 16 May 2015 (UTC).
You've done an admirable job improving this to GA status. The article itself is fine, but I'm uncertain about the hook, which I find difficult to understand. What does "scored for the same forces" mean? By "forces", do you mean instruments? I think the hook could also be shorter and punchier. I would suggest a shorter and more readily understandable hook - perhaps something like the following. Prioryman (talk) 17:39, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
ALT1 ... that Bach's Ascension Oratorio follows the story of the Ascension of Jesus and concludes with a chorale fantasia?
- Thanks for looking, and so soon, but this is saying too little. The similarity to the (well-known) Christmas oratorio really seems worth mentioning. I would have said "instruments", if there weren't voices also. Simpler wording welcome, my try:
- ALT2: ... that in his Ascension Oratorio, as in his Christmas Oratorio, Bach used three trumpets and timpani, and ended with a chorale fantasia? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 18:12, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
