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The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Yazan (talk) 16:09, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

Lego-Brücke

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Lego Bridge in Wuppertal

Created/expanded by Tomcat7 (talk). Self nom at 12:09, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

  • Awesome subject. Date and length check out, and the article is suitably referenced (I don't read German too well so with Google's help in translation, I'm ready to accept them in good faith). Two things that aren't game-breaking, but are probably worth addressing in the interest of improving the article: First, it could use a good copy-edit for grammar; second, I see a lot of redlinks, and I wonder whether the author is planning on creating those articles as well. I also had some reservations about the hook being too short and possibly misleading (is it a bridge made out of real Lego bricks, or just painted that way?) although it's certainly eye-catching. Still, I'm going to ask for the author's response just so he's aware of these issues and to see what he thinks. --dragfyre_ʞןɐʇc 14:47, 22 October 2012 (UTC)
  • User:Dr. Blofeld performed a copyedited. I reworded the hook. Regards.--Tomcat (7) 18:10, 22 October 2012 (UTC)
    • That works. I've gone ahead and given it an extra copy edit, since I noticed a few words that still seemed out of place. Please feel free to revert any of it if you feel I've changed the meaning too much. Thanks for submitting this article! --dragfyre_ʞןɐʇc 18:44, 22 October 2012 (UTC)
      • Thanks. I will create the missing articles. Regards.--Tomcat (7) 09:57, 23 October 2012 (UTC)

I created an article, so I propose this alternative hook:--Tomcat (7) 12:01, 23 October 2012 (UTC)

Review needed for new hook and Klauser Schuhe. Tomcat7, 1 more QPQ is needed. --Redtigerxyz Talk 05:24, 28 October 2012 (UTC)

I reviewed Template:Did you know nominations/Harry Ramberg. Regards.--Tomcat (7) 12:54, 28 October 2012 (UTC)
Sorry for the delay—I haven't been paying attention to DYK lately! I've gone and taken a look at Klauser Schuhe, and I have some concerns about it, mainly the first paragraph after the lead.
  • "Klara Klauser put the cornerstone of Klauser Schuhe with the buying of ... Kamp" Should be reworded; "put the cornerstone" is somewhat confusing. Literally placed a cornerstone, or simply established the company?
  • After looking into the references using Google Translate, it seems as though the point that's being put forward is that the company was established through forced takeovers of a number of different businesses that were originally run by German Jews, who met with various fates as noted. Aryanization should definitely be linked and the concept explained in further detail in this paragraph. Also, the sentences about the individual businesses that were taken over are very confusing—for example, it sounds as if Siegfried Rosenberg became the owner ("assumed ownership") of Klauser Schuhe in March 1938, but that wouldn't make a lot of sense in context. The entire paragraph should probably be rewritten, to be safe.
Overall, a good start for an article, but like Lego-Brücke, it needs copy editing and the issues above should be addressed before it's accepted. I went through and made a few changes that I felt might make sense, but the best would be for someone knowledgeable to take another look and to double-check grammar. As for the hook, I tweaked it a little to increase readability, but otherwise, everything seems to check out with date, length, and hook ref. --dragfyre_ʞןɐʇc 15:01, 5 November 2012 (UTC)
I copyedited the article. I disagree that the concept should be described.--Tomcat (7) 15:08, 5 November 2012 (UTC)
  • Articles should be reviewed again to make sure prose issues previously identified have been resolved. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:52, 17 November 2012 (UTC)
  • This is now a 2 article nomination. Both articles were created on or around 23rd October, seemingly translated from the German Wikipedia articles. They are both long enough and the prose issues mentioned above seem to have been dealt with. The new hook is not satisfactory - Klauser Schuhe sponsored the painting not the building of the bridge. I suggest: Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:12, 18 November 2012 (UTC)
  • ALT2 Hook spread across 2 articles is cited and content confirmed by linked references. Also checking two articles for plagiarism founds no copying of English. (AGF no translation of German source) Good to go. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 11:12, 20 November 2012 (UTC)
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