Template:Did you know nominations/Kent Angus

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:02, 26 July 2019 (UTC)

Kent Angus

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• ... that Canadian businessman Kent Angus contributed more than 75,000 hockey jerseys to international events? [1]

• Reviewed: Sumiko Hennessy & Asian Pacific Development Center (2nd of 2 credits)
• Comment: Special occasion request for July 31 birthday

Created by Flibirigit (talk). Self-nominated at 15:45, 17 June 2019 (UTC).

• New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. However, the hook fact is not in the source given, so I added a "citation needed" tag to the article. Personally, I think you should add some more colorful information, such as his providing replacement jerseys or jerseys for charity, to the hook. QPQ done. Yoninah (talk) 22:14, 19 June 2019 (UTC)

• I updated the citation's definition. It was a cut and paste error. As for your suggestion, I am not opposed to it, but nothing is coming to mind right now. I might think of something later, but you're welcome to suggest hooks. Flibirigit (talk) 02:37, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• @Yoninah: I have been asked to contribute some alternative hooks. Here are four I think are "hooky" enough. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 17:00, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• ALT1: ... that Kent Angus, a Canadian businessman and Paul Loicq Award winner, incorporated "discovery pieces" into hockey jerseys for Team Canada and other countries at the 2010 Winter Olympics?
• ALT2:...that Kent Angus, who has contributed more than 75,000 hockey jerseys to international events, won the Paul Loicq Award in 2012?
• ALT3:...that Kent Angus not only produced jerseys for 49 Ice Hockey World Championships and four Winter Olympic Games, but also contributed to disaster relief fundraising and online auctions for Olympic memorabilia?
• ALT4:...the Kent Angus, a Canadian businessman and former NIKE Inc. employee, contributed more than 75,000 hockey jerseys to international events before retiring in February 2019?

• Thank you HickoryOughtShirt?4 for the suggestions. I like your suggestions, and they are much appreciated as I had some brain cramps on this one. Flibirigit (talk) 17:18, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• Always happy to help! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 17:20, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• Thank you, HickoryOughtShirt. There's no inline cite for the "discovery pieces" in ALT1. Having never heard of the Paul Loicq Award, I don't see the need to include it in a hook. May I suggest:

• ALT5: ... that Kent Angus, who supplied more than 75,000 jerseys for 49 Ice Hockey World Championships and four Winter Olympic Games, customized the apparel for players at the arena? Yoninah (talk) 21:56, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• The discovery pieces was covered by the citation at the end of the paragraph. I have duplicated it for the sake of DYK. The Paul Loicq Award is one of the highest honours given by the IIHF, one step below its Hall of Fame. I feel it is important enough to mention. Customizing apparel on site is actually more common than you would think. Professional ice hockey teams in the NHL, KHL et cetera have a person doing so. I'm still flexible on the hook. Flibirigit (talk) 22:20, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• ALT3 is slightly inaccurate as he personally was not cited as contributing to disaster relief, but rather the jerseys were auctioned off the contribute. Flibirigit (talk) 22:24, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

• Well, I like ALT1 best now that you explained about the Paul Loicq Award. I added some more information about what the "discovery pieces" were from the source, so readers who are piqued by the ALT1 hook will have a little more to read about. ALT1 hook refs verified and cited inline. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 22:35, 20 June 2019 (UTC)