Template:Did you know nominations/Joanne Berger-Sweeney

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:54, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Joanne Berger-Sweeney

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... that Joanne Berger-Sweeney is the first African-American and the first woman to serve as president of Trinity College in Connecticut? Source: "Berger-Sweeney, who is the first African-American and the first woman to lead the college, came to Trinity from Tufts University where she was a dean." Megan, K. (July 17, 2018). Trinity Renews President Joanne Berger-Sweeney's Contract for Five Years. Hartford Courant

Reviewed: Al-Muhallab ibn Abi Sufra

Created by Jerilyn98 (talk). Nominated by QuakerSquirrel (talk) at 15:28, 3 June 2019 (UTC).

First thing, you need to specify Trinity College (Connecticut), given all the dozens of options at Trinity College, at least three of which are far better known. Long and new enough, seems neutral. Is a qpq needed? Oh, oh Earwig is 75% confident of copyvio from her college bio - see here. Considerable rewriting will be needed. Johnbod (talk) 19:54, 8 June 2019 (UTC)

@Johnbod: I changed the hook to Trinity College (Connecticut). In addition, within the article, I added that link the first time it was mentioned in each section. (With the exception of the first sentence -- it links to the correct Trinity, but it says "Hartford, Connecticut" right after it, so adding "(Connecticut)" seemed redundant.) I've also rewritten the portions of concern. Copyvio now shows "violation unlikely". Finally, I think I already did the QPQ, unless that's something different from what I understand. Above, you'll see I reviewed Al-Muhallab ibn Abi Sufra. Let me know if there are any other concerns. Thanks for reviewing! QuakerSquirrel (talk) 13:30, 9 June 2019 (UTC)

You should only link it once in the article (and not use the form with parentheses in text). Here, I'd use "Trinity College in Connecticut" or "Trinity College, Connecticut". Earwig now I think ok, although still picking up on this passage:

"These demands include that she retract the club's approval, release a statement denouncing white supremacy and change the two-step process to approve clubs.

The Churchill Club is a 10-member group that describes itself as “dedicated to the preservation, dissemination and extension of the Western moral and philosophical tradition." The club is the first campus chapter of the Churchill Institute, which was started by Gregory B. Smith, a Professor of Political Science at Trinity College. Smith drew criticism for referring to African-American, Asian-American, Latino, Muslim and Jewish culture houses on campus as “tribal enclaves.”".

Johnbod (talk) 02:48, 18 June 2019 (UTC)

@Johnbod: I think I've addressed the issues. Thanks for your feedback! Let me know if I've missed anything or if there are other issues. QuakerSquirrel (talk) 16:37, 21 June 2019 (UTC)

GTG. Yes, all ok now, thanks. Johnbod (talk) 02:13, 28 June 2019 (UTC)