Template:Did you know nominations/Jim Brown (footballer, born 1952)

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:48, 2 August 2016 (UTC)

Jim Brown (footballer, born 1952)

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... that the footballer Jim Brown collected financial records during his time working as a commercial manager at Chesterfield, that were eventually used to prosecute club chairman Darren Brown for fraud?

5x expanded by Kosack (talk). Self-nominated at 16:25, 26 July 2016 (UTC).

Reviewed: Shawshank tree

5x expanded readable prose, interesting and reference hook. Article is of good standard and within policy. QPQ met. EchetusXe (talk) 20:51, 29 July 2016‎ (UTC)

The hook is 198 characters. I suggest trimming it a little:
ALT1: ... that while working as a commercial manager at Chesterfield, footballer Jim Brown collected financial records that were eventually used to prosecute club chairman Darren Brown for fraud? Yoninah (talk) 20:01, 1 August 2016 (UTC)

If it needs trimming down slightly, that's fine. Kosack (talk) 20:04, 1 August 2016 (UTC)

Yes, it could do with trimming down but I couldn't think of a way to trim it down, so the slightly shorter ALT is better imo.Echetus Xe 21:18, 1 August 2016 (UTC)

Restoring tick for ALT1 per Echetus' review. Yoninah (talk) 23:36, 1 August 2016 (UTC)