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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 08:33, 4 May 2013 (UTC).

Jean-Baptiste Philibert Willaumez

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... that Jean-Baptiste Willaumez (pictured) was given a reflecting circle by Louis XVI, seconded D'Entrecasteaux in his expeditions, and refused to commit war crimes ordered by General de Rochambeau?

5x expanded by Rama (talk). Self nominated at 23:16, 16 April 2013 (UTC).

Nice expansion, date, size, neutrality, all fine. However: the word seconded is not used in the article, more to the point, nor is the term war crimes. Please add those terms, properly referneced, to the article, or propose an alt hook that does not introduce new, unreferenced terms. Please ping me on talk for a re-review. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 07:09, 21 April 2013 (UTC)

Good point; "war crime" is particularly problematic on this respect because it introduces as contemporary legal concept in a 200-old setting. How about the alternative hook below? Rama (talk) 07:29, 21 April 2013 (UTC)

... that Jean-Baptiste Willaumez (pictured) was given a reflecting circle by Louis XVI, had a peninsula named after him during his service in D'Entrecasteaux' expeditions, and refused to commit mass executions ordered by General de Rochambeau?

for ALT1. With my limited French I was able to check some sources, which checked out. The mass execution on the Swiftsure was written about in a most grizzly tone. Yuck.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 17:51, 3 May 2013 (UTC)