Template:Did you know nominations/Jane Trahey

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 21:12, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Jane Trahey

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... that advertising executive Jane Trahey persuaded Lauren Bacall, Marlene Dietrich, and Judy Garland to pose for an ad campaign, giving them each a mink coat as payment?

Reviewed: Zephyrette

Moved to mainspace by Jim Carter (talk). Nominated by MelanieN (talk) at 22:51, 20 February 2015 (UTC).

For Women's History Month please Victuallers (talk) 21:42, 21 February 2015 (UTC)

This was a well-written article about an interesting woman. She accomplished quite a lot! I just added a few commas to the piece. The article was nominated the same day it was created. It appears to be long enough. No copyvio or plagiarism to be concerned about. The citations are appropriately placed throughout the article, and all the sources are reliable. QPQ is done. The hook is short, interesting, neutral, and cited. I am a new reviewer and would like a second opinion.Mchuedem (talk) 15:58, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Just a suggestion, but perhaps to focus more on Trahey's own career an alternative hook could be ALT1: ... that Jane Trahey was one of the first women to own and manage an advertising agency? Otherwise the first hook is good to go.Mchuedem (talk) 16:24, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, and the suggestion. I prefer the original hook, but the person who promotes this nomination to the queue can make the choice. My reason: your proposed hook is accurate but it isn't "grabby". To a certain extent the hooks are designed to grab people's attention, make them curious, so they will click on the link and go read the article. So the hook need not be a one-sentence summary of the article; it can be anything that is truthful and sourced and interesting. I can't judge your review since I was the nominator; hopefully some passing third party, or the promoter, will give you feedback. --MelanieN (talk) 16:37, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

I just discovered that an image is available. If we want to use it, the review will have to be updated, since the original nomination did not include an image. ~~I don't know how to format an image for DYK at this late stage in the nomination.~~ (Thanks, Mandarax!) This is the image:

ALT2: ... that advertising executive Jane Trahey persuaded Lauren Bacall, Marlene Dietrich, and Bette Davis to pose for an ad campaign (pictured), giving them each a mink coat as payment? — Preceding unsigned comment added by MelanieN (talk • contribs) 17:45, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
The ALT2 hook looks like it is good to go. It is formatted correctly and the image matches the hook itself. It is cited, interesting, and neutral. I am a new reviewer and would like a second opinion. Mchuedem (talk) 15:47, 25 February 2015 (UTC)

@MelanieN: I looked through your review and it seems OK. This article has only a few sources and some of the phrases seemed similar to the ad encyclopedia ref. I changed the ones I remembered from the source. Do keep reviewing. Thanks. Victuallers (talk) 17:11, 25 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks, Victuallers. I assume these comments were directed to Mchuedem. --MelanieN (talk) 19:52, 25 February 2015 (UTC)

Comment I am striking ALT2. It appears that the image may not be usable; it has been nominated for deletion at Commons. [1] The original and ALT1 are still OK. --MelanieN (talk) 19:31, 26 February 2015 (UTC)

I'm just repeating the "good to go" tick here, since it may have gotten lost in the verbiage. The original hook and ALT1 have been approved. ALT2 has been struck. --MelanieN (talk) 19:53, 4 March 2015 (UTC)