Template:Did you know nominations/I Love You Colonel Sanders!
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- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:45, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
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I Love You Colonel Sanders!
... that players attempt to win the love of the young, attractive Colonel Sanders in I Love You Colonel Sanders!?Source: "Things got even weirder when the game was revealed to be a dating simulator with Colonel Sanders as the prized companion." ("I played KFC's bizarre Colonel Sanders dating game so you don't have to")
- Reviewed: Exempt, less than 5 DYKs in my life
Created/expanded by Akrabbim (talk). Self-nominated at 20:33, 4 February 2020 (UTC).
- Unless I'm missing something, this was last edited on 15 December 2019, and submitted to DYK on 4 February 2020, so it fails the newness criteria of WP:DYKRULES. -- RoySmith (talk) 03:56, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
- Oh, no, wait. I was reviewing the wrong article. I was looking at Colonel Sanders, not I Love You Colonel Sanders!. -- RoySmith (talk) 03:58, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
General: Article is new enough and long enough |
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Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems |
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Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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Overall: There's a few hits on earwig for copied text, but it's mostly instances of "I Love You, Colonel Sanders! A Finger Lickin’ Good Dating Simulator", which is the formal name of the sim, so not a problem. -- RoySmith (talk) 04:12, 6 February 2020 (UTC)
- This hook falls short of Rule C6. It is all plot. Please provide a new hook. Yoninah (talk) 21:34, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I just looked over the article. While it is true that Colonel Sanders is a real-life person, the hook is written in a way that obscures that. A tweak of the hook wording would solve it. Alternately, the bolded link could be piped to say what it is (a dating sim). Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 21:37, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- Hmm, how about this? —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 21:48, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1:
... that the young, attractive, and date-able portrayal of Colonel Sanders in I Love You Colonel Sanders! is part of an effort by KFC to make the Colonel a "part of pop-culture"?
- OK, but what about removing the repetition?
- ALT2: ... that the young, attractive, and date-able portrayal of Colonel Sanders in a parody dating sim is part of an effort by KFC to make the Colonel a "part of pop culture"? Yoninah (talk) 21:58, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- You could also turn around the wording in ALT0:
- ALT0a:
... that in a 2019 parody dating sim commissioned by KFC, players attempt to win the love of the young, attractive Colonel Sanders?Yoninah (talk) 22:03, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I don't see how ALT2 is an improvement over ALT1, but I'm fine with it if you think it's better. I think it's hookier than ALT0 and 0a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 22:07, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- Well, ALT1 has the word
Colonel
three times andSanders
twice. ALT2 has twoColonel
and oneSanders
:) Pinging @RoySmith: to review ALT2. Yoninah (talk) 22:20, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- I'm a newbie when it comes to DYK (and particularly DYK reviews). With that in mind, it seems kind of wordy to me. How about:
- ALT2a: ... that the young, attractive, and date-able Colonel Sanders in a parody dating sim is part of an effort by KFC to make him a "part of pop culture"? -- RoySmith (talk) 23:38, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- Well, ALT1 has the word
- I don't see how ALT2 is an improvement over ALT1, but I'm fine with it if you think it's better. I think it's hookier than ALT0 and 0a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 22:07, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1:
- Hmm, how about this? —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 21:48, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
It doesn't make it that much shorter and I think it loses a little clarity, so I think I prefer ALT2 to 2a. —Aᴋʀᴀʙʙıᴍ talk 14:06, 12 February 2020 (UTC)