Template:Did you know nominations/Hunting Party (Body of Proof)
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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 03:19, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
Hunting Party (Body of Proof)
[edit]... that Body of Proof episode "Hunting Party" featured two mysteries of separate victims, which combined into one towards the end?
Created/expanded by M.Mario (talk). Self nom at 19:19, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
ALT1- ... that Body of Proof episode "Hunting Party" was directed by Paul Holahan, known for directing Shark, a show which Body of Proof cast member Jeri Ryan appeared on?
Article is fine, but I don't like the wording of either of the hooks. The original has a misplaced modifier (it sounds like the victims are combining), and the only citation for the plot is the episode itself – I'm not sure if that's OK or not. Otherwise it would be fine. The ALT feels a bit awkward, but could be rephrased to work better. For example:
- ALT2 - ... that Body of Proof episode "Hunting Party" was directed by Paul Holahan and featured Jeri Ryan, both of whom had worked on the legal drama Shark?
- If someone else could give an opinion as well it would be appreciated. Focus (talk) 02:41, 5 December 2012 (UTC)
- I looked at this but do not think the inline citation is sufficient to support ALT2 - the fact that "Jeri Ryan" featured in "Shark". Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 5 December 2012 (UTC)
I have added that reference to the article and I am now happy with the ALT2 hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:06, 17 December 2012 (UTC)
