Template:Did you know nominations/Hikaru Aizawa

The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by Allen3 ^talk 14:45, 29 January 2014 (UTC)
Insufficient progress toward resolving outstanding issues

Hikaru Aizawa

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... that Hikaru Aizawa is ~~the first~~ a moe anthropomorphism character created by Microsoft Taiwan for endorsing Microsoft Silverlight?

Created by Sky6t (talk). Self nominated at 11:15, 17 December 2013 (UTC).

The article is long enough and was new enough when proposed for DYK. The hook is short enough. No QPQ necessary as this is the editor's first DYK submission. However, the hook is not adequately cited in the article: the idea that Hikaru Aizawa was "the first moe anthropomorphism character" either created by Microsoft Taiwan, or created by Microsoft Taiwan to endorse Microsoft Silverlight is not cited in the article. Here is a suggestion for an alternative: ALT1 ... that Hikaru Aizawa was a moe anthropomorphism character created by Microsoft Taiwan for endorsing Microsoft Silverlight? - tucoxn\^talk 00:17, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

Correct symbol. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:40, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

@Tucoxn: OK I've modified this. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sky6t (talk • contribs) 09:51, 11 January 2014‎

The problems in the hook were fixed. The hook is now adequately cited in the article. I couldn't find any copyvios or close paraphrasing in the article. I'm giving it the AGF tick since some of the sources are Chinese and Japanese, which I can't read. Good to go. - tucoxn\^talk 01:16, 16 January 2014 (UTC)

As pointed out by Fram on WT:DYK, this has a number of issues, chief among them the long paragraph on Microsoft Silverlight—the entire first paragraph under Planning is irrelevant to Hikaru. Once that is removed, the article will be well under the minimum 1500 prose character requirement. As important, the hook facts are not supported by sources at the end of relevant sentences. These include the entire statement that Hikaru is a "moe anthropomorphism" character that was created expressly for Silverlight. The article also needs a copyedit before it's ready for the main page: phrases like "campaign plannings" are problematic, and the second sentence of the intro is incomplete; in addition, there needs to be more sources directly about Hikaru, both for the article itself (the final half of the intro is completely unsourced, and it contains most of the information about her, or at least her fictional family), and to establish that this character is notable. Unfortunately, I can't check the Chinese and Japanese sources, but the AkihabaraNews source says very little that's usable—it's only talking about the website, not about overall promotion. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:56, 17 January 2014 (UTC)

In light of the comments above and here this submission needs a different reviewer. I gave it two tries. - tucoxn\^talk 02:20, 18 January 2014 (UTC)

Issues have not been addressed, and the nominator's only edit since December 17 is above in this template. Closing as unsuccessful. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:13, 28 January 2014 (UTC)