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The result was: promoted by 4meter4 (talk) 20:51, 20 January 2016 (UTC)

heimkommen

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~~... that Arthur Tulloch Nightingale played the role of a German grandfather in the viral ad video Heimkommen?~~
ALT 1 ~~... that, in viral Christmas ad video Heimkommen a German grandfather fakes his death to reunite his family?~~
ALT 2 ~~... that Arthur Nightingale played the Heimkommen German grandfather faking his death to reunite his family on Christmas?~~

Reviewed: India Speaks

Created by Polentarion (talk). Self-nominated at 13:35, 23 December 2015 (UTC).

Length, date and sources verified. Articles is neutral. The only thing I would like to suggest is, maybe, a more exciting hook. What about:
ALT3: ... that in the viral ad video Heimkommen, a German grandfather fakes his own death to reunite his family? Just a suggestion. Calistemon (talk) 03:23, 27 December 2015 (UTC)

Thnx! Hooks added based on your line. Polentarion Talk 12:01, 6 January 2016 (UTC)

Pulled from prep for sourcing and verification issues. #1: The approved hook does not have an inline cite. #2: Per Rule H2, Calistemon cannot approve his own hook. Yoninah (talk) 14:31, 14 January 2016 (UTC)

Hook1 is based on the quote of the grandfather himself at the end of the video. Films can be used as a source in such contexts. I used a suggestion of Calistemon but paraphrased it in my own words in hook 2. OK? Polentarion Talk 15:26, 14 January 2016 (UTC)

I think sourcing the video should be fine (and likely accepted AGF), but it will still require inline citations. Jolly Ω Janner 17:22, 14 January 2016 (UTC)

I have expanded the intro and added two inline citation confirming hook #2. Calistemon (talk) 21:50, 14 January 2016 (UTC)

Thank you, @Calistemon:. ALT3 hook refs AGF and verified, and cited inline. Full review: New enough, long enough, well referenced, neutrally written, no close paraphrasing seen. Hook refs AGF and verified, and cited inline. QPQ done. ALT3 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 13:37, 20 January 2016 (UTC)