Template:Did you know nominations/George William Symes
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 10:24, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
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George William Symes
[edit]- ... that George William Symes was awarded the Military Cross for single-handedly capturing twenty enemy soldiers?
Created by Hawkeye7 (talk). Self-nominated at 21:44, 17 August 2015 (UTC).
- Review by Headbomb
- A1: Article was created on 16 Aug 2016. This is a pass.
- A2: Article is way more than 1500 characters. This is a pass.
- A3: Seems to pass everything. Draws heavily from the London Gazette as source, but the citations to it are appropriate and inline with the other sources cited (e.g. Australian Dictionary of Biography). This is a pass.
- A1: Article was created on 16 Aug 2016. This is a pass.
- H1: Under 200 characters. This is a pass.
- H2: Hook is neutral and interesting, and supported by an inline citation to a reliable source. This is why I reviewed this particular DYK despite the length of the article. This is a pass.
- H1: Under 200 characters. This is a pass.
- O1: Hawkeye7 reviewed a DYK. This is a pass.
- O2: Does not apply. This is a pass.
- O1: Hawkeye7 reviewed a DYK. This is a pass.
- Comment: The prose of the article however, is a bit in need of copyediting. The first paragraph of George William Symes#Second World War for instance has lots of periods indicating the end of a sentence, followed by something that doesn't start with a capital letter. For instance
- "He was Assistant Adjutant and Quartermaster General (AA&QMG) of the 43rd (Wessex) Infantry Division, and commanded the 6th Battalion, York and Lancashire regiment, with the British Expeditionary Force in France. [16] in November 1940, he became acting brigadier as commander of the 8th Infantry Brigade. as part of the 3rd Infantry Division, it was a mobile reserve tasked with counter-attacking an invasion attempt."
- This makes is hard to follow the section, especially to non-native speakers.
- Thanks for your review. My problem was a faulty shift key on my keyboard. This has been repaired. I have copy edited the article, and fixed these up. You didn't need to AGF on the reference; clicking on it would have taken you to the appropriate page of the London Gazette. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:49, 17 August 2015 (UTC)
- Oh I didn't AGF on the references. They were fine. Just pointing out for other people that there's no real issue from drawing so heavily on The London Gazette (e.g. WP:ONESOURCE isn't an issue). The AGF is with the typo-fixing and stuff. The whole thing's a pass AFAICT, although I'm not quite sure if I need to close it myself. The template seems to behave weirdly. I'm a bit of a DYK review noob here. Headbomb {talk / contribs / physics / books} 04:17, 18 August 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review. My problem was a faulty shift key on my keyboard. This has been repaired. I have copy edited the article, and fixed these up. You didn't need to AGF on the reference; clicking on it would have taken you to the appropriate page of the London Gazette. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:49, 17 August 2015 (UTC)