Template:Did you know nominations/Eugene Neeley

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:51, 28 August 2014 (UTC)

Eugene Neeley

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... ~~that one-armed football player Eugene Neeley (pictured) became a consensus first-team All-American despite his missing right limb?~~

Reviewed: Maricopa County Courthouse

Created by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 05:49, 24 August 2014 (UTC).

A bit short (DYK Check says 1407 characters); otherwise, new enough, neutral, sourced, and without apparent copyvio. Image is PD due to age. The hook is interesting, but could we leave off "despite his missing right limb"? I feel like it's redundant. EricEnfermero ^HOWDY! 10:05, 25 August 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I've expanded the article a fair bit and offer a couple of alt hooks for you to choose from. Cbl62 (talk) 16:42, 25 August 2014 (UTC)

alt 1 ... that one-armed football player Eugene Neeley (pictured) became a consensus first-team All-American?
alt 2 ... that All-American football player Eugene Neeley (pictured) used the stump from his severed right arm "with telling effect in blocking and straight arming"?

ALT1 is good to go now. I think it's a little hookier than the longer alternative. Good work. EricEnfermero ^HOWDY! 05:29, 27 August 2014 (UTC)