Template:Did you know nominations/Drago Siliqi

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:35, 6 February 2012 (UTC)

Drago Siliqi

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... that Albanian poet and literary criticist Drago Siliqi encouraged and helped inaugural winner of the Man Booker International Prize, Ismail Kadare, to write his first novel, The General of the Dead Army?

Comment: This is my first DYK nomination so please advice if anything is wrong. Also, I will not accept any suggestions that the hook should concern his death. The hook should be positive. Thank you!

Created/expanded by MalsorShqipniet (talk). Self nom at 07:31, 13 January 2012 (UTC)

The problem with the current hook is that it is wordy--in fact, it is too long (it's 224). Start by cutting "ist" from criticist. Moreover, more than half of it is really about someone else. You can remove "inaugural winner...Prize", which I don't think you need anyway.

ALT: "... that Albanian poet and literary critic Drago Siliqi encouraged Ismail Kadare to write his first novel, The General of the Dead Army?"

But that's still mostly about someone else. I have no suggestions to offer--that he died tragically, you don't want that--though I don't understand your objection. Finally, the article needs a copyedit, for punctuation, word choice, grammar. Drmies (talk) 05:17, 14 January 2012 (UTC)

I've given it a copyedit, and I think the ALT hook is fine. Any other issues? Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:06, 5 February 2012 (UTC)

Come to think of it, I don't think the bits about the ambassador are pertinent to the article. Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:13, 5 February 2012 (UTC)

Article is in reasonably good shape now. I removed the content about the ambassador from the article. AGF due to foreign-language sourcing. Here is an idea for hook wording:

ALT2: ... that, as a publisher and literary critic, Drago Siliqi increased translation of foreign literature into Albanian and encouraged Ismail Kadare to write his first novel, The General of the Dead Army? --Orlady (talk) 17:56, 5 February 2012 (UTC)

I'm not the nominator here, but I think ALT2 is a little better. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:09, 5 February 2012 (UTC)