Template:Did you know nominations/Death of Lucas Leonard

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:49, 17 November 2015 (UTC)

Death of Lucas Leonard

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• ... that the Chadwicks, New York church at which a young man was beaten to death in 2015 was described by its neighbors as a "cult" where people "used to build fires on the roofs, and there was chanting and weird rituals"?

Created by FiredanceThroughTheNight (talk). Self-nominated at 00:07, 22 October 2015 (UTC).

• New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. No QPQ needed for first-time nominator. However, the hook is overlong; the limit is 200 characters, and preferably less. Can you suggest a shorter, hooky fact? Yoninah (talk) 23:42, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

• How about ALT1: "... that the Chadwicks, New York church at which a young man was beaten to death in 2015 operated a website that sold pedigree yorkies"?

• The connection isn't really clear. How about shortening the original hook:
• ALT2: ... that the church at which a young man was beaten to death was described by its neighbors as a "cult" where people "used to build fires on the roofs, and there was chanting and weird rituals"? Yoninah (talk) 02:13, 12 November 2015 (UTC)

• Your suggestion sounds good. FiredanceThroughTheNight (talk) 02:35, 12 November 2015 (UTC)

• Thanks. ALT2 hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT2 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 11:37, 12 November 2015 (UTC)