Template:Did you know nominations/Colin Mawby

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 14:45, 8 December 2011 (UTC)

Colin Mawby

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... that Colin Mawby, a prolific composer of choral music and a conductor at Westminster Cathedral and of the National Chamber Choir of Ireland, said, "I have to write for particular people"?

Reviewed: Papyrus Oxyrhynchus 654
Comment: 2* expansion of unreferenced BLP

Created/expanded by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self nom at 18:17, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

I tweaked the hook to have a comma before the quotation. Marrante (talk) 17:24, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

All checks out, but I think the quote in the hook doesn't make much impact out of context. How about:

ALT1: ... that the prolific composer and Westminster Cathedral conductor Colin Mawby said, "I cannot write choral music unless I work with choirs.... I have to write for particular people"?

Antony–22 (^talk⁄_contribs) 04:20, 8 December 2011 (UTC)

Fine. I just removed the duplication of "choral", in the ALT it's in the quote, - and he also wrote children's opera and other music. In the hook I found it necessary for the context. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:13, 8 December 2011 (UTC)