Template:Did you know nominations/Chloe Magee

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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 16:01, 25 July 2012 (UTC)

Chloe Magee

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... that at the 2008 Summer Games Chloe Magee became the first ever Irish badminton player to win a match at the Olympics?

Reviewed: Hannah Vermeersch, Phoebe Stanley, Elizabeth Patrick, Sally Kehoe, Alexandra Hagan, Renee Chatterton, Tess Gerrand
Comment: another one for use during the Olympics

Created/expanded by Basement12 (talk). Self nom at 13:07, 11 July 2012 (UTC)

Article date, length, and general compliance with policy all check out. Suggested hook is interesting and verified by inline citation. I suggest holding hook for use during the Olympics, as per nominators request. --ThaddeusB (talk) 23:00, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

I think the inserted phrase after "that" doesn't read as well. I'd suggest doing it as a piped link, thusly:

ALT1... that Chloe Magee became the first ever Irish badminton player to win a match at the Olympics?

Shawn in Montreal (talk) 20:01, 13 July 2012 (UTC)

I don't think doing it like that is a good idea, it could give the impression that she was only the first in 2008, perhaps it would work okay if the comma were removed from the original hook? - Basement12 (T.C) 20:21, 13 July 2012 (UTC)

I wouldn't pipe "Olympics" to "2008 Summer Olympics", but ALT1 w/o the piping would be fine. Otherwise, the phrase can be set off by commas: "... that, at the 2008 Summer Games, Chloe Magee ..." My personal preference would be for ~~ALT1 minus the piping, as the year doesn't really at anything~~ a hook that includes the date, as otherwise readers will naturally assume it is talking about the 2012 games. --ThaddeusB (talk) 18:44, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Works for me. Yes, it's the fact that she was the first at any Olympics, anyway. We'd just save the link to 2008 Summer Olympics for the actual article. Shawn in Montreal (talk) 21:00, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Sorry, but this is even tighter, I think:

ALT2... that Chloe Magee was the first Irish badminton player to win a match at the Olympic Games? Shawn in Montreal (talk) 18:25, 15 July 2012 (UTC)

My new preference is for:

ALT3... that in 2008 Chloe Magee became the first Irish badminton player to win a match in the history of the Olympic Games?

A hook without a date will likely lead the reader to (inaccurately) assume the 2012 games are being discussed.--ThaddeusB (talk) 02:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)